Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct basic grammar (verb forms and article use).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I’m in a good mood I often photograph mountains and open skies because they make me feel calm. Also, I sometimes capture cityscapes when I want something more dynamic.

提案: Provide a clear direct answer and follow with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and unclear words, and use correct nouns (e.g., ‘people’ not ‘pet’) and plural/singular agreement.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and less crowded. For instance, I enjoy open fields and fresh air, and I find them more relaxing than busy city streets.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific example with correct vocabulary. Reduce hesitations and use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘because’ to explain why you prefer views abroad.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For example, I love visiting islands abroad where the beaches and natural scenery are stunning and quite different from what I have at home.

× Yes I do. I think it depend on my mood uh, for example, when I happy, I like taking picture uh, mountain and sky. But when I said I like taking picture.

✓ Yes, I do. I think it depends on my mood. For example, when I am happy, I like taking pictures of mountains and the sky. But when I said I like taking pictures.

Errors: 'depend' should be 'depends' to agree with subject I think (third-person singular after 'it' refers to 'it depends'), so Subject-Verb Agreement (present tense). 'when I happy' lacks verb 'am' (present tense be). 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' to match general activity. 'mountain and sky' should be plural/with article: 'mountains and the sky' or 'a mountain and the sky' depending on meaning. Suggestions: ensure correct present tense forms ('depends', 'am') and pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally ('pictures', 'mountains'). Keep clauses separate and use punctuation to avoid run-on sentences.

× Uh, I think I prefer will in rural area because I don't like crowded pet. I like, uh, atmosphere P uh, pit full and.

✓ Uh, I think I prefer rural areas because I don't like crowded places. I like a peaceful atmosphere.

Errors: 'prefer will in rural area' is ungrammatical: remove 'will' and use plural 'rural areas' to express general preference. 'crowded pet' is incorrect word choice; intended 'places'. 'atmosphere P uh, pit full and' is garbled; corrected to 'a peaceful atmosphere.' Suggestions: omit extraneous words, use correct noun 'places', use article 'a' with singular noun 'a peaceful atmosphere', and use plural 'rural areas' for general preference.

× Well, uh, I prefer Will in another hunty. For example, the bands is a very beautiful scenery and the nature is very uh, wonderful.

✓ Well, I prefer other countries. For example, the beaches are very beautiful and the nature is wonderful.

Errors: 'prefer Will in another hunty' contains wrong words; 'prefer other countries' expresses the idea correctly. 'the bands is a very beautiful scenery' should be 'the beaches are very beautiful' or similar; subject-verb agreement: 'beaches are' (plural). 'the nature is very...wonderful' -> 'nature is wonderful' (article optional but 'the nature' can sound unnatural; 'nature is wonderful' is idiomatic). Suggestions: use correct vocabulary ('other countries', 'beaches'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('are' with plural), and avoid unnecessary fillers.