Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời khá tự nhiên nhưng còn lặp ý và một vài từ ngữ không chính xác (ví dụ: “pitiful things of my daylight”, “many breathtaking views” lặp từ). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp ý, dùng từ vựng chính xác và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể ngắn gọn. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc và giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like close-up shots of small, everyday objects because they reveal details people often miss. Additionally, I take landscape photos of famous places when I travel, such as the skyline at sunset, because the light makes the scene dramatic.

提案: Câu trả lời trả lời trực tiếp nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp từ, cấu trúc không gọn (ví dụ: “it makes will make”). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do cụ thể và thêm một chi tiết minh họa ngắn. Tránh lỗi thì và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy capturing the contrast of tall buildings and busy streets. For instance, I like photographing city skylines at dusk when the lights create interesting reflections and patterns.

提案: Ý chính rõ nhưng dùng từ không chính xác (“refer views” nên là “prefer views”). Câu có thể ngắn gọn hơn và cung cấp lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: kiến trúc lịch sử, nền văn hóa khác biệt). Thêm một câu ví dụ để minh họa sẽ tăng tính thuyết phục. Giữ câu trong giới hạn 3–4 câu.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering historical sites and different architectural styles. For example, I love photographing the classical facades in Paris and the modern silhouette of the Sydney Opera House because they offer very different visual stories.

× Of course, taking photos of different views is really my cup of tea.

✓ Of course, taking photos of different views is really my cup of tea.

No correction needed; sentence correctly uses the gerund phrase 'taking photos' as the subject. Suggestion: keep as is.

× For example, I really like taking photos of small, tiny, pitiful things of my daylight.

✓ For example, I really like taking photos of small, tiny, or overlooked details in my day-to-day life.

The original uses 'pitiful' incorrectly to describe objects and 'of my daylight' is awkward. Use adjectives that fit (e.g., 'overlooked') and 'in my day-to-day life' is a natural phrase. Suggestion: replace incorrect adjective and phrase with appropriate collocations.

× Or also I love taking many breathtaking views of famous places.

✓ I also love taking many breathtaking photos of famous places.

'Breathtaking views' is acceptable but 'taking breathtaking views' is awkward; we take photos of views. Remove 'Or' at sentence start and use 'I also' for smooth structure. Suggestion: say 'taking breathtaking photos of famous places.'

× I would like to refer views in urban areas because I enjoy taking photos of many tall buildings and city lines and it makes will make my photos more interesting.

✓ I would like to focus on views in urban areas because I enjoy taking photos of many tall buildings and city skylines, and it will make my photos more interesting.

'Refer views' is incorrect; use 'refer to' or better 'focus on'. 'City lines' should be 'city skylines'. The phrase had 'it makes will make'—combine to 'it will make'. Use consistent future effect 'will make'. Suggestion: use correct collocations and remove duplicated auxiliaries.

× Actually, I refer views in other countries because I love exploring many historical sites in different famous places like Paris in France or Sydney Opera House in Australia.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in other countries because I love exploring historical sites in famous places like Paris in France or the Sydney Opera House in Australia.

'Refer views' is wrong; should be 'prefer views'. 'Exploring many historical sites in different famous places' is wordy; simplify to 'exploring historical sites in famous places'. Add 'the' before 'Sydney Opera House'. Suggestion: use 'prefer' and include definite article for named landmarks.