Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct nouns and plurals and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph coastal sunsets and city skylines at different times because the light and angles change the mood, and looking at the images later helps me relive those moments.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then explain briefly with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid filler phrases and repeated words. Use correct article with 'a hard question' and plural/singular forms.

例: That's a difficult question because both have their own appeal, but I usually prefer rural areas. For instance, countryside scenes offer peaceful landscapes and natural light that make my photos feel more atmospheric and timeless.

提案: Answer directly and support with specific examples. Reduce vague phrases and colloquialisms like 'you know' and clarify the idea about perception. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep sentences short.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I often find stunning skies and sunsets there. Moreover, I believe beauty depends on how you look at things, so if you pay attention you can find lovely scenes both at home and abroad.

× Well, yes, I like to take a picture for a different views in a different times, in a different situation, in a different angles that make me feel the moment again when I saw that pictures.

✓ Well, yes, I like taking pictures of different views at different times, in different situations, and from different angles because they make me feel the moment again when I saw those pictures.

The student mixed 'like to take a picture' with plural contexts; preference verbs often use the -ing form (like taking). Also several noun number errors: 'a different views' should be 'different views'; 'a different times' -> 'different times'; 'a different angles' -> 'different angles'; 'that make me feel' refers to plural 'pictures' so 'make' is correct; 'when I saw that pictures' -> 'when I saw those pictures' (demonstrative + plural). Use of prepositions: 'take pictures of' and 'at different times' and 'from different angles' are correct patterns. Improve by using plural nouns consistently and using 'taking' after 'like'.

× Well this is an hard question because each both of them have the unique what they call a unique views, a unique unique things to give you when you take a photography.

✓ Well, this is a hard question because both of them have unique views and unique things to offer when you take photographs.

Errors include incorrect article before 'hard' ('a hard' not 'an hard'), incorrect phrase 'each both of them' (choose 'both of them'), redundant and ungrammatical 'the unique what they call a unique views' (should be 'unique views'), and 'a photography' should be 'photographs' or 'photography' without 'a'. Also plural agreement: 'unique views' plural, 'unique things' plural. Suggest simplifying and using correct articles and plural forms.

× So I will find it really hard but usually I prefer rural area.

✓ So I find it really hard, but usually I prefer rural areas.

'Prefer rural area' is incorrect because 'rural area' is countable and here we mean rural areas in general, so use plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area' with article. Also tense/modal: 'I will find it really hard' is odd for habitual preference; 'I find it really hard' fits better. Suggest using present simple for general statements and plural for general categories.

× I think I prefer views from my country since I really have a beautiful sky, a beautiful sunset, and I believe that it's from your eyes, not actually from your views.

✓ I think I prefer views from my country because we have beautiful skies and beautiful sunsets, and I believe it's about your eyes, not the views themselves.

Problems: 'since I really have a beautiful sky' is awkward—use plural 'we have beautiful skies' for general claim. 'It's from your eyes, not actually from your views' is unclear and misuses 'views'; better: 'it's about your eyes, not the views themselves.' Also replace 'since' with 'because' for clarity. Adjust articles and plural nouns for general statements.

× So if you like to, you know, see the beautiful thing, you will find it everywhere.

✓ So if you want to see beautiful things, you can find them everywhere.

Colloquial fillers ('you know') and awkward infinitive 'like to, you know, see the beautiful thing' should be simplified. Use plural 'beautiful things' and plural pronoun 'them'. 'You will find it everywhere' should agree in number: 'you can find them everywhere' or 'you will find them everywhere'. Also 'want to' is more natural than 'like to' in this conditional context.