Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và độ chính xác từ vựng; nói rõ ràng, tránh lỗi sai như “keen on” thiếu động từ, nhầm “videos” và câu thừa/thiếu mạo từ. Hãy tách ý thành câu chủ đề + 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ thích hợp (because, so). Thực hành phát âm và ngắt nghỉ để câu nghe tự nhiên hơn.

例: To be honest, I really enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax when I am stressed. I also like sharing my pictures with friends so they can give me feedback on my photography.

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và loại bỏ ý lặp; nêu câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi đưa ví dụ cụ thể (vị trí, chi tiết: kiến trúc, ánh sáng). Dùng liên từ như because, so và câu ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Thực hành cách mô tả cảm xúc và lý do cụ thể.

例: I prefer photographing urban areas because their architecture and street scenes feel more interesting to me. For example, old buildings and busy streets provide varied textures and lighting that make photos more visually appealing.

提案: Chú ý thì động từ và danh từ số ít/ số nhiều (a view, other countries), tránh câu nói không trôi chảy như “you know” hoặc lặp từ. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về điều bạn muốn khám phá (kiến trúc, phong cảnh, văn hóa), dùng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, for example).

例: I prefer views in other countries because I have seen many similar scenes in Vietnam. For example, I would like to photograph different architectural styles and landscapes abroad to experience new perspectives and cultural features.

× To be honest, I really keen on taking photos of different videos because it's the best way for me to take it easy when I feel stressed and I can share my photos to my friends to for them to evaluate my taking photo skill.

✓ To be honest, I am really keen on taking photos of different views because it's the best way for me to relax when I feel stressed, and I can share my photos with my friends for them to evaluate my photography skills.

The verb 'keen' requires the verb 'to be' before it (be + adjective). Use 'am' for first person singular (present tense). 'Different videos' is incorrect meaning; context requires 'views'. 'Take it easy' is natural but 'relax' is clearer. Use 'share ... with' not 'share ... to'. Remove extra 'to'. 'Evaluate my taking photo skill' is ungrammatical; use 'evaluate my photography skills' and plural 'skills' for general ability.

× From my point of view, I prefer to take photo in urban areas because urban areas bring me a an ancient feeling and I when and when I taking photo in urban areas I can avoid the life from rural so the photo is become more beautiful.

✓ From my point of view, I prefer to take photos in urban areas because urban areas give me an ancient feeling, and when I take photos in urban areas I can avoid rural life, so the photos become more beautiful.

Use plural 'photos' for general reference (quantifier/adapted). Use preposition 'in' with 'in urban areas' (correct). 'Bring me an ancient feeling' is awkward; 'give me an ancient feeling' is natural. Correct 'when and when I taking' to 'when I take' (verb form and redundancy). Use 'rural life' rather than 'life from rural'. Use present tense 'become' to match general statement and plural 'photos'.

× I prefer view in other country because, you know, I live in Vietnam for a long time, so the view in Vietnam is very similar for me.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, you know, I have lived in Vietnam for a long time, so the views in Vietnam are very familiar to me.

Use plural 'views' and plural 'other countries' for general preference. Use the present perfect 'have lived' to indicate duration up to now. 'Very similar for me' is unnatural; 'very familiar to me' is correct. Include articles where needed and adjust plurality.

× So I want to go to other country to discover the different, different view that's very fun, static.

✓ So I want to go to other countries to discover different views that are very fun and exciting.

Use plural 'other countries' and plural 'views' for generalization. Remove repetitive 'different, different'. 'That's very fun, static' is ungrammatical; 'static' is the opposite of what is intended; use 'exciting' or 'interesting'. Ensure subject-verb agreement 'views that are'.