Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and shows enthusiasm, but it is slightly repetitive ("clicking photos" used often) and a little wordy. To improve, produce a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Vary verbs (use "take" or "photograph") and avoid unnecessary phrases like "for this for maintaining my passion."

例: Yes — I love taking photographs of different views. For example, I often go to nearby parks to photograph landscapes and sunsets because I enjoy capturing light and colour. Additionally, I sometimes photograph birds and small animals when I visit nature reserves.

提案: The answer is direct and appropriate, but very short. To score higher, extend with one or two specific reasons using linking words. This shows development and coherence while staying concise.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer quieter, more scenic landscapes and more opportunities to photograph wildlife. For instance, rolling fields and forests provide varied subjects and natural light that I rarely find in the city.

提案: The answer shows a clear preference but is repetitive and contains unclear phrases ("habituated with my country", repeated words, filler phrases like "So anyway"). Improve by giving a concise topic sentence, one clear reason with specific detail, and avoid redundant words. Use linking words to make it coherent.

例: I prefer photographing views in my own country because I grew up familiar with its landscapes and the biodiversity here is exceptional. For example, our coastal cliffs and tropical forests offer unique light and subjects that inspire my photography more than places I've only seen in photos.

× I feel like that's an very obvious question.

✓ I feel like that's a very obvious question.

The indefinite article 'a' must be used before words beginning with a consonant sound. 'Very' modifies 'obvious', but the article goes before 'very', so 'an' is incorrect; use 'a' because 'very' begins with a consonant sound. Replace 'an' with 'a'.

× From the very beginning of my life, I was habituated with my country.

✓ From the very beginning of my life, I have been accustomed to my country.

The phrase 'was habituated with' is unidiomatic. Use the present perfect 'have been accustomed to' to express a state continuing from the past to the present. Also use the preposition 'to' with 'accustomed'. This matches the implied ongoing relationship with the country.

× So I would definitely like to do photography in my country.

✓ So I would definitely like to do photography in my country.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable, but a more natural collocation is 'do photography' or 'take photographs'. No grammatical change required under the given list; keep as is or optionally use 'take photographs' for more natural phrasing.

× And my country is heavily, heavily rich in nature, so it's a very good subject to to do photography in my country.

✓ And my country is very rich in natural beauty, so it's a very good place to do photography.

'Heavily rich' is awkward; use 'very rich in natural beauty'. Also 'subject to do photography' is incorrect collocation; 'place to do photography' or 'place for photography' is natural. Removed repeated 'to' and avoided repeating 'my country' at the end for clarity.

× So anyway, I would prefer my country for photography or capture.

✓ So anyway, I would prefer my country for photography.

'Photography or capture' is redundant and 'capture' as a noun is unnatural here. Use 'photography' or 'taking photographs'. Simplify to 'prefer my country for photography' to be grammatically correct and natural.