Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise (max 5 sentences), and provide a clearer, more specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so", "for example"). Correct tense and phrasing mistakes and avoid vague phrasing like "photographed on vacation always remind me."

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because photos help me preserve memories. When I look back at them, I can remember where I was and how I felt, so they bring back emotions. For example, on our last family vacation my son and I laughed at a sunset photo because it reminded us of that peaceful evening.

提案: Clarify unclear phrases and correct grammatical errors (e.g., "walking through few UH" is unclear). Keep answers coherent with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "so"). Add specific sensory details or a short anecdote to make the response more vivid and natural.

例: I prefer rural areas because they feel cozier and more relaxing than the city. I enjoy the fresh air and wide green spaces, so a short walk along country lanes helps me unwind. For example, after a busy week I often stroll through a nearby park and listen to birds — it always calms me down.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy (subject-verb agreement: "landscapes and architecture feel" or "seeing new landscapes and architecture is"). Use linking words to connect reasons and add a brief specific example of a place or style you find interesting. Keep it within five sentences and natural in tone.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I haven't visited many and the scenery and culture are often very different from home. Seeing new landscapes and architecture is exciting and inspiring, so I return with fresh ideas and memories. For example, I loved the narrow streets and colorful buildings when I visited a European town last year.

× For example, our son said I photographed on vacation always remind me of that evening.

✓ For example, our son said the photographs I took on vacation always remind him of that evening.

The original sentence misuses 'photographed' (a verb) where a noun 'photographs' or the verb phrase 'I took' is needed, and has wrong word order. Also pronoun reference and tense agreement were incorrect: 'said I photographed on vacation always remind me' is ungrammatical. Use the past simple 'I took' for the action that produced the photos and 'photographs' as the noun; ensure subject 'they' or 'the photographs' agree with 'remind' and use correct pronoun 'him' for 'our son'. Suggestion: replace the verb form with a noun phrase or a correct past participle usage (e.g., 'the photographs taken on vacation') and fix pronoun and word order.

× I enjoy the fresh air and the natural scenery, and for example, walking through few UH would help me relax after a busy week.

✓ I enjoy the fresh air and the natural scenery, and for example, walking through a few [parks/fields] would help me relax after a busy week.

The phrase 'walking through few UH' has multiple errors: 'few' without an article implies 'not many' and is unlikely intended; it should be 'a few' to mean 'some'. 'UH' seems to be a filler or typo and should be replaced with a suitable noun such as 'parks' or 'fields'. Use 'a few' for countable plural nouns. Also verb 'would help me' is acceptable as a conditional/polite statement. Suggestion: choose a concrete plural noun and use 'a few' for clarity.

× Seeing new landscape and architecture feel exciting and inspiring.

✓ Seeing new landscapes and architecture feels exciting and inspiring.

Subject-verb agreement: the gerund clause 'Seeing new landscapes and architecture' is treated as a singular activity, so the verb should be 'feels' not 'feel'. Also 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to parallel 'architecture' and to match the idea of multiple places. Suggestion: use 'feels' for singular gerund subjects and pluralize 'landscape' to 'landscapes'.