Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid small grammatical errors (e.g., plural/singular, articles) and redundancy. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, my city has a beautiful harbor and coastline, so I like to photograph them to preserve the memories and share the pictures with my friends.

提案: Clarify your position at the start and avoid unrelated or unclear words. Use correct verb forms and articles, and link reasons with connectors like 'because' or 'so'. Limit to 2–3 sentences and give one specific example of a rural view.

例: I prefer rural views because they make me feel more relaxed. For example, I enjoy wide green fields and quiet country roads, which are very different from the busy streets I see every day in my city.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons and one concrete example of what you like to see abroad. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (plural/singular, article use). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to organize ideas. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see different architecture and cultural landscapes. For example, I enjoy visiting European cities to photograph historic buildings and narrow streets, which contrast with the tall modern towers in my hometown.

× Use Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views.

No change needed; the sentence already correctly uses plural 'photos' and 'views'. Suggestion: none.

× For example, my city has a beautiful harbor and sea view and I'd like to capture them so I can save these memory and share them to my friend.

✓ For example, my city has a beautiful harbor and sea views, and I'd like to capture them so I can save these memories and share them with my friends.

Errors: 'sea view' should be plural 'sea views' to match 'harbor' and 'them'; 'these memory' should be plural 'these memories' (singular/plural issue); 'share them to my friend' uses wrong preposition and singular 'friend'. Use 'share them with my friends'. Suggestions: make nouns agree in number and use correct prepositions: 'share with'. Relevant problem types applied: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions).

× Apple refused in rural areas because I think they make me feel more comfortable and relaxed and also I think the views in rural area is something that I cannot see in my daily life because living in a urban city.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I think they make me feel more comfortable and relaxed, and I think the views in rural areas are something I cannot see in my daily life because I live in an urban city.

Errors: 'Apple refused' is nonsensical; likely intended 'I prefer' (sentence structure error). 'rural area is' should be 'rural areas are' to match plural; 'because living in a urban city' needs subject 'I' and 'an' before vowel sound is correct but 'urban' begins with a vowel sound so 'an urban city' is acceptable though 'an urban city' is redundant - 'I live in an urban city' or 'I live in a city' works. Also use pronoun 'they' correctly for 'rural areas'. Suggestions: start with clear subject and verb, ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent number. Relevant problem types applied: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors).

× I prefer views in other countries so I always go travelling because the view in my country is mainly about tall buildings, sea and also on the urban city view and I find it boring.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, so I always travel because the views in my country are mainly tall buildings and the sea, and I find them boring.

Errors: 'the view in my country is' should be plural 'the views in my country are' to match plural subject; 'sea and also on the urban city view' is awkward—use 'the sea and urban cityscapes'. 'go travelling' is acceptable but 'travel' is more natural. Ensure plural agreement: 'them' to refer to 'views'. Suggestions: use consistent plural nouns and smoother phrasing. Relevant problem types applied: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors).

× So I would like to go travelling to other country to see their building, their architecture and also different view.

✓ So I would like to travel to other countries to see their buildings, their architecture, and different views.

Errors: 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally; 'building' should be plural 'buildings'; 'different view' should be 'different views'. Also 'go travelling' -> 'travel' is more natural. Suggestions: pluralize nouns when referring to general or multiple instances and maintain parallel structure in lists. Relevant problem types applied: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 26 (Sentence structure errors).