Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct collocations and articles, and limit length to 2–3 sentences. Use linking words only if adding details. For example, say why you enjoy it and give one specific detail or occasion.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love nature. For example, I often photograph green landscapes and forests when I go hiking because their colors and patterns are calming.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then support it with two concise, specific reasons using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and incorrect phrases such as 'limited house' or 'see clear everything.'

例: I prefer views in rural areas. Rural places have fewer buildings and less pollution, so the scenery is more open and clearer; for example, I can see rolling fields and distant mountains without obstruction.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammatical errors: use articles, plural forms, and proper verb tenses. Be specific about what you like and give one brief reason or example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many green landscapes and mountain scenery. For instance, I often visit nearby hills to photograph terraces and forests that I find unique and familiar.

× 'I do like to take a different picture of the view because I am fond of the nature.'

✓ 'I do like to take different pictures of the view because I am fond of nature.'

'Different' and 'a different picture' suggest a single, unusual picture; plural 'different pictures' fits the meaning. 'The nature' is incorrect; 'nature' is an uncountable noun and should not take the definite article here.'

× 'So I like to take a picture of the nature greenery.'

✓ 'So I like to take pictures of the greenery.'

'The nature greenery' is ungrammatical: 'nature' is uncountable and does not combine with 'greenery' like that. Use 'the greenery' or 'nature's greenery'; plural 'pictures' matches habitual action.'

× 'Rural areas will be better for the uh few because there will be a limited house and also there won't be much more population so we can see clear everything.'

✓ 'Rural areas are better for taking photos because there are fewer houses and not as much population, so we can see everything clearly.'

'Will be' is inappropriate when stating a general preference; use present simple for general truths. 'A limited house' is incorrect: use 'fewer houses' (plural) with countable noun. 'Much more population' should be 'not as much population' or 'a smaller population.' 'See clear everything' has incorrect word order and form: use 'see everything clearly.'

× 'there will be a limited house'

✓ 'there will be fewer houses'

'House' is countable and when indicating a small number use the plural 'houses' and 'fewer' not 'limited.' 'Limited' is an adjective describing capacity, not count quantity.'

× 'there won't be much more population'

✓ 'there won't be as much population'

'Population' is uncountable, so use 'much' with appropriate comparative structure. 'Much more' implies increase; the intended meaning is smaller amount, so 'not as much population' or 'a smaller population' is clearer.'

× 'I prefer the views in my country the rather than other countries because in my country there are a lots of green landscape mountains so that I like to captured the view of my own country.'

✓ 'I prefer views in my country rather than in other countries because my country has many green mountains and landscapes, so I like to capture its scenery.'

Mixed and incorrect tense forms and articles: 'the views' can be 'views' for general preference. Remove misplaced 'the' before 'rather.' 'There are a lots of' is wrong: use 'my country has many' or 'there are a lot of' without 'a' before 'lots.' 'Green landscape mountains' is awkward; 'green mountains and landscapes' is natural. 'I like to captured' uses past participle; use base form 'capture' after 'like to.'