Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is unclear and contains grammar errors and odd vocabulary. Make your response direct with a clear topic sentence, one or two supporting details, and use linking words. Specifically: 1) Start with a clear statement (e.g., "Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views"). 2) Replace vague or incorrect phrases (e.g., "I am so proud in putting pictures in my different and landscapes") with precise language (e.g., "I like to photograph landscapes and cityscapes"). 3) Add one specific reason or example, using linking words such as "because" or "for example". 4) Keep it under five sentences and maintain natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me relax and notice details I might otherwise miss. For example, I like photographing coastal landscapes at sunrise because the light and colors are beautiful. I also sometimes shoot city streets at night to capture reflections and movement.

提案: This answer is largely unintelligible and does not directly address the question. To improve: 1) Give a clear preference first (urban or rural). 2) Provide one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). 3) Use concrete vocabulary related to scenery (e.g., "skyscrapers", "fields", "mountains", "quiet"). 4) Keep it concise (1–3 sentences).

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy quiet open spaces and natural scenery. For example, I like fields and mountains where I can take peaceful landscape photos without much noise.

提案: The answer is confusing and contains incorrect words. To improve: 1) State your preference clearly (own country or other countries). 2) Give a specific reason and an example—mention a place or type of view. 3) Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "heritage", "natural wonders", "coastlines"). 4) Stay within a few sentences and avoid unrelated phrases.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures and landscapes. For instance, I would love to visit the Philippines to see its famous beaches and islands, which are very different from the scenery in my own country.

× Oh very much, I am so proud in putting pictures in my different and landscapes as it gives me a calm scenery.

✓ Oh, very much. I am so proud of putting pictures of various landscapes on my profile because they give me a calm feeling.

The student used incorrect prepositions ('proud in', 'putting pictures in', 'my different and landscapes'). Use 'proud of' for the emotion, 'pictures of' to indicate subject of the photos, and a clearer modifier 'various landscapes' instead of 'my different and landscapes'. Also changed 'calm scenery' to 'calm feeling' to match natural English. Ensure commas and sentence breaks for clarity.

× I had escaped and I played this period of comfort.

✓ I escaped into taking photos during that peaceful period.

Original sentence is confusing and lacks clear subject-action relation. 'Had escaped' (past perfect) is inappropriate without a reference point; change to simple past 'escaped' to fit narrative. 'I played this period of comfort' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I escaped into taking photos during that peaceful period' to express the intended meaning.

× Interpretation and 3018 day itself thriller various and still provided a lot more on tension scenes before examples here at home down to work again.

✓ I was trying to describe many different scenes and feelings, but my words became confused; for example, at home I see tension in everyday life as well as surprising moments.

The original is largely incoherent and lacks grammatical structure. I reconstructed the sentence to convey a reasonable meaning that matches the question about preference (urban vs rural): expressing difficulty describing scenes and giving an example. This fixes sentence structure errors and provides clear subject-verb relations.

× The unknown as the crystal paradise of the night, the deathbed, we have a vast of neutral universe.

✓ The unknown can feel like a crystal paradise at night or an empty, vast universe.

Phrases like 'the deathbed' and 'a vast of neutral universe' are incorrect adjective and noun combinations. 'A vast universe' is correct; 'neutral' is not a natural modifier here, so 'empty' or 'vast' is clearer. Reordered and simplified to form a grammatical sentence with appropriate adjective-noun agreement.

× The poison is too large of 1 country I prefer to be in heritage.

✓ The country is too large for me to know everything, so I prefer to focus on its heritage.

'Too large of 1 country' is ungrammatical quantifier use. Replace with 'too large for me to know everything' to convey meaning. Also 'prefer to be in heritage' is incorrect; change to 'prefer to focus on its heritage' to express preference correctly.

× Heritage and things from the Philippines known for a lot of natural wonders.

✓ The Philippines is known for many natural wonders and its heritage.

Sentence lacks a verb and uses an incorrect noun order. Adding 'is known' fixes the missing verb and 'many' is the correct quantifier. Adjusted word order to make a complete, grammatical sentence.

× I think it's pretty wonders for me to explore your ***** period.

✓ I think it would be wonderful for me to explore them someday.

'It's pretty wonders' is ungrammatical adjective-noun use and tense/context mismatch. Changed to 'it would be wonderful' (conditional/future intent) to match the question about preference for visiting other countries, and replaced vague 'your ***** period' with 'them someday' to produce a grammatical, natural response.