Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but slightly long and contains minor grammar issues (e.g., singular/plural agreement: “photos helps” → “photos help”). To improve: start with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. Vary vocabulary (e.g., “capture” instead of “take”) and correct subject-verb agreement.

例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views because each place has unique scenery and colours. For example, I like to capture sunsets and city skylines to remind me of special moments, so I often keep them in a travel album.

提案: This answer addresses the question but has grammar and coherence problems (e.g., “rural area” should be “rural areas”, stray word “The because”). To improve: state your preference in one clear sentence, then give one specific reason with a linking word like “because” or “because of”, and a brief example. Correct articles and plurals and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer rural areas because I love natural scenery and peaceful surroundings. For instance, I often photograph meadows full of white wildflowers because they create simple but striking compositions.

提案: Your idea of liking both is good, but there are grammar errors and unclear references (e.g., “II is a diverse country” and subject-verb agreement “offer” → “offers”). Improve by giving a clear topic sentence, then one contrasting reason with linking words like “on the one hand…on the other hand.” Use specific examples to illustrate differences.

例: I enjoy views both at home and abroad. On the one hand, my country offers diverse landscapes and colourful flora that feel familiar; on the other hand, visiting other countries lets me photograph unfamiliar plants and architectural styles that I find inspiring.

× photos helps me remember those precious moments.

✓ photos help me remember those precious moments.

The subject 'photos' is plural, so the verb must be the base form 'help' not 'helps'. Use plural verb forms to agree with plural subjects. Suggestion: Match plural subjects with plural verbs (no -s in present simple).

× I prefer views in rural area because I love the beauty of the scenery that rural area has.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I love the beauty of the scenery that rural areas have.

'Rural area' is singular but the sentence speaks generally about rural locations, so the plural 'rural areas' fits. Also 'scenery' can be used collectively, but 'areas have' matches plural subject. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when referring to places in general.

× The because I like nature, environment and I like taking pictures of the surroundings which are covered with white wildflowers.

✓ Because I like nature and the environment, I like taking pictures of the surroundings, which are often covered with white wildflowers.

The original begins with an extraneous 'The'. 'Environment' requires the definite article 'the' when spoken generally as a concept here. Also clarity improves by adding a comma and 'often' for natural frequency. Suggestion: Remove unintended words, use 'the environment' and proper clause punctuation.

× I prefer both domestic and international view because every country has its own significant and own unique view.

✓ I prefer both domestic and international views because every country has its own significant and unique views.

'View' should be plural ('views') when referring to both domestic and international instances. Also avoid repeating 'own'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns and avoid unnecessary word repetition.

× II is a diverse country and offer stunning landscapes and colourful flora, while other countries have different kinds of scenery and plants that I also enjoy.

✓ It is a diverse country and offers stunning landscapes and colourful flora, while other countries have different kinds of scenery and plants that I also enjoy.

'II' is a typo for 'It'. Subject-verb agreement: singular subject 'It' requires 'offers' (third person singular). Sentence structure improves by correcting the pronoun and verb form. Suggestion: Fix typos and ensure subject and verb agree in number.