Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับประโยคให้ชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ ใช้ประธาน-กริยาให้ถูกต้อง ลดคำพูดลอยๆ (uh) และเพิ่มรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น เหตุผลหรือความรู้สึกที่ได้จากการถ่ายภาพ พร้อมใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อขยายความ

例: Yes, I love photographing different views, especially when I travel abroad. It helps me capture new experiences and often inspires me creatively. For example, seeing a sunrise over a foreign city gives me fresh ideas for my photography projects.

提案: ปรับไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง อธิบายให้ชัดว่าเหตุใดทิวทัศน์ชนบทจึงผ่อนคลาย และยกตัวอย่างกิจกรรมหรือการใช้ภาพเหล่านั้น เช่น ใช้เป็นวอลเปเปอร์หรือแรงบันดาลใจ ใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น because, so, therefore

例: I prefer rural views because the natural scenery is calming and helps reduce my stress. For example, I often take photos of fields and forests and use them as computer wallpapers or backgrounds for my design projects.

提案: แก้ประโยคให้สมบูรณ์ ตอบตรงคำถามและให้ตัวอย่างเปรียบเทียบระหว่างทิวทัศน์ในประเทศและต่างประเทศ อธิบายเหตุผลและใช้คำเชื่อมเช่น sometimes, because, so to make it coherent และหลีกเลี่ยงคำย้ำไม่จำเป็น (uh)

例: It depends on the scenery. Sometimes I prefer views in my hometown because they reflect my mood and memories; other times I choose views abroad because they remind me of new experiences and different cultures. For instance, a local riverside can feel nostalgic, whereas a foreign mountain range feels adventurous.

× Of course, I prefer taking pictures of different views uh than in my countries.

✓ Of course, I prefer taking pictures of different views, especially in my country.

The student used 'my countries' incorrectly; the definite/number article and plural form are wrong here. Use 'my country' (singular) if referring to their own country. Also 'than' is incorrect in this context; use 'especially in' to show preference. Suggestion: use singular 'my country' unless you truly mean multiple countries and remove 'than'.

× It seem like that is explore my experience and seeking the new inspiration for my life.

✓ It seems like it allows me to explore my experiences and seek new inspiration for my life.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It seem' should be 'It seems' (third person singular). Verb forms and structure are incorrect: 'is explore' is ungrammatical and 'seeking' should be parallel with 'explore' so use base forms 'explore' and 'seek'. Also 'experience' should be plural if general. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree and maintain parallel verb forms.

× I prefer view in rural areas because of it's a few layer the natural scenery that reduce my emotions and stressful.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because of the layered natural scenery, which reduces my stress and calms my emotions.

Plural: 'view' should be 'views' to match 'I prefer' general preference. Articles: 'it's a few layer the natural scenery' is incorrect; use 'the layered natural scenery' or 'layered natural scenery'. Subject-verb agreement: 'reduce my emotions and stressful' is wrong; 'reduces my stress' fits. Suggestion: use plural 'views', correct article use, and proper noun forms like 'stress' instead of 'stressful'.

× And then sometime I took some the rural views for my template in computer and.

✓ Sometimes I take some rural views to use as templates on my computer.

Article and tense errors: 'took' (past) doesn't fit general habit; use present 'take' or 'sometimes I take'. 'some the rural views' incorrectly uses both 'some' and 'the' — use 'some rural views'. Preposition: 'in computer' should be 'on my computer'. Suggestion: choose correct tense for habitual actions and avoid unnecessary articles.

× It's depend on the scenery.

✓ It depends on the scenery.

Third person singular present: 'It's depend' is incorrect; use 'depends'. Suggestion: for 'it' as subject, use verb with -s in present simple.

× Sometime I use the wheel in my hometown for express some mood in my life.

✓ Sometimes I use a wheel in my hometown to express some moods in my life.

Plural and article: 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'the wheel' is unclear — if one wheel, use 'a wheel'. 'for express' should be 'to express'. 'some mood' better as 'some moods' or 'a mood'. Suggestion: correct adverb form, use appropriate article, and infinitive 'to express'.

× Sometime I change to the uh, abroad will to show about that uh, and remain about the my experience there that I.

✓ Sometimes I change to abroad locations to show that and to remember my experiences there.

Tense and structure: 'Sometime' -> 'Sometimes'. 'change to the abroad will' is ungrammatical; use 'change to abroad locations' or 'travel abroad'. 'show about that' -> 'show that'. 'remain about the my experience' -> 'remember my experiences'. Suggestion: use clear verbs ('travel', 'remember'), correct adverb form, and simplify clauses.