Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and add a specific detail or brief example. Use one clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail with a linking phrase. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'the natures' and 'for example' together).

例: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views, especially natural scenes like sunsets. For example, last month I took several sunset shots at the beach that captured vivid orange and purple tones, which made the photos feel calm and nostalgic.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid filler phrases like 'you know.' Provide a specific reason and one concrete example to support your preference. Use a linking word to connect idea and detail.

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more scenic. For instance, watching a sunset over rice fields is peaceful and creates memorable images, which helps me relax and inspires my photography.

提案: Provide a clear answer first (own country, other countries, or both) and use correct grammar and plural forms. Give one specific contrast or example about what you like locally and one thing you wish to see abroad. Use linking words like 'however' or 'also'.

例: I enjoy the natural views in the Philippines because its sunsets and coastal colors are breathtaking. However, I would also like to visit other countries to see different landscapes, such as the northern lights in Iceland, to compare their light and atmosphere with what I see at home.

× I just love the vibe and the comfort that it gives me.

✓ I just love the vibe and the comfort that they give me.

The nouns 'vibe' and 'comfort' are two items, so the plural pronoun 'they' should refer to them instead of singular 'it'. Use 'they give' to match plural antecedent. To improve, identify the number of nouns the pronoun refers to and ensure pronoun and verb agree in number.

× I prefer views from rural areas because I am a nature lover and I find it more peaceful when I see sunsets.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I am a nature lover and I find them more peaceful when I watch sunsets.

The sentence mixed preposition choice and pronoun reference. 'Views in rural areas' is more natural than 'from rural areas'. Also 'sunsets' is plural; use 'them' to refer back rather than 'it'. Use 'watch sunsets' (common collocation) instead of 'see sunsets' for natural phrasing.

× You know, the atmospheres that it give and the photograph that it creates, not just in the photos now, but also in your head.

✓ You know, the atmosphere that it gives and the image that it creates, not just in the photos but also in your head.

Use singular 'atmosphere' to describe a general feeling; then use singular 'it gives' to match 'atmosphere'. 'Photograph' is better as 'image' here. Remove unnecessary 'now' and use 'in the photos' without 'now'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it gives' matches singular subject.

× Nature's here in the Philippines are breathtaking.

✓ Nature here in the Philippines is breathtaking.

The contraction 'Nature's' causes confusion and leads to plural verb 'are'. Use 'Nature' as a singular subject with verb 'is'. Avoid contractions that merge words when they create ambiguity.

× I love the sunsets, the colors and you know the image of it.

✓ I love the sunsets, the colors, and you know the image of them.

'Sunsets' and 'colors' are plural, so the pronoun referring back to them should be 'them' rather than 'it'. Ensure pronoun number matches the noun it replaces.

× But I also dream of going to other country and appreciate and experience their nature also.

✓ But I also dream of going to other countries and appreciating and experiencing their nature as well.

Use plural 'countries' when speaking generally. Also use 'going to' plus plural noun. After 'dream of', use gerunds 'appreciating' and 'experiencing' to maintain parallel structure. 'Their nature' is fine when referring to other countries; use 'as well' instead of 'also' at end for smoother English.