Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural but a bit repetitive and slightly wordy. Keep sentences concise, use a topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., “photograph” or “capture”), avoid filler words like “so” and “any,” and correct small grammar (e.g., “sometimes” instead of “sometime”).

例: Yes, I love photographing different views. For example, when I visit the countryside I often capture rivers and fields, and in cities I photograph monuments and skyline scenes, which help me remember each place.

提案: Your response answers the question but hesitates and repeats. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers (“uh,” “so”) and use correct collocations (e.g., “photos of the Opera House and the Harbour Bridge”).

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy photographing architectural landmarks and lively waterfronts. For instance, living in Australia I often photograph the Opera House and the Harbour Bridge, which offer dramatic shapes and vibrant city backdrops.

提案: Good idea, but the answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “people’s lives,” “when I visit natural areas”), and avoid repeating “it doesn't matter.”

例: I enjoy photographing views wherever I travel, whether at home or abroad, because natural scenes help me relax and inspire creativity. For example, when I visit a coastal park or a mountain trail I take many photos to capture the peaceful atmosphere and unique light.

× Whenever we go to any countryside area or any city area, I like to click pictures of rivers or sea or sometime an important monument or infrastructure.

✓ Whenever we go to the countryside or to a city, I like taking pictures of rivers, the sea, or sometimes of an important monument or piece of infrastructure.

Use of 'click pictures' is nonstandard; 'take/ taking pictures' is correct. 'Any countryside area or any city area' is wordy; 'the countryside or a city' is more natural. 'Sea' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to the sea in general. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Also 'infrastructure' is uncountable in this sense, so use 'a piece of infrastructure' or 'infrastructural features'. Present participle 'taking' fits the continuous habitual action context.

× So currently I'm living in an urban area, so I like to click photos of monuments and infrastructures built on the Riverside.

✓ Currently I'm living in an urban area, so I like to take photos of monuments and infrastructure built on the riverside.

Avoid repeating 'so'. Use 'take photos' instead of 'click photos'. 'Infrastructures' is incorrect pluralization; 'infrastructure' is usually uncountable. 'Riverside' should be lowercase and not 'the Riverside' unless naming a specific place; 'on the riverside' is more natural. Present continuous 'I'm living' is acceptable for current residence, but keeping 'Currently I'm living' is fine.

× For example, I'm residing in Australia, so I like to click, uh, photos of Opera House and Harbor Bridge.

✓ For example, I live in Australia, so I like to take photos of the Opera House and the Harbour Bridge.

Use 'I live' or 'I am living'—'residing' is formal and uncommon in speech. Replace 'click photos' with 'take photos'. Landmark names typically take the definite article 'the' (the Opera House, the Harbour Bridge). Also use the British/Australian spelling 'Harbour' for Australia. Remove filler 'uh' in formal corrected sentence.

× So I really enjoy clicking photos of urban areas instead of rural areas.

✓ So I really enjoy taking photos of urban areas rather than rural areas.

Replace 'clicking photos' with 'taking photos'. 'Instead of' is acceptable but 'rather than' is more natural in this contrast. Present simple 'enjoy taking' correctly expresses a general preference.

× I prefer views wherever I go.

✓ I prefer views wherever I go.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It expresses a general preference and uses correct pronouns.

× It doesn't matter if it's my own country or it's another country because nature plays a very significant role in individuals life.

✓ It doesn't matter whether it's my own country or another country because nature plays a very significant role in an individual's life.

Use 'whether' for alternatives. Avoid repeating 'it's'. 'Another country' is sufficient. 'Individuals life' lacks the possessive and article; use 'an individual's life'.

× It's very peaceful whenever you went to a nature specific zone.

✓ It's very peaceful whenever you go to a nature-specific area.

The original mixes present general statement with past tense 'went'; use present 'go' for habitual/general truths. 'Nature specific zone' is awkward; use 'nature-specific area' with a hyphen or 'natural area'. Also 'you' is generic; that's acceptable in conversational English.

× So it doesn't matter for me.

✓ So it doesn't matter to me.

Preposition 'for' is not the natural collocation here; 'matter to me' is the correct phrase.

× I just love to click photos whenever I go.

✓ I just love to take photos whenever I go.

Replace 'click photos' with the natural collocation 'take photos'. Infinitive 'to take' or gerund 'taking' both work; 'love to take' is acceptable in this context.