Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but very short and contains a minor grammatical error (singular 'a picture' instead of plural or general statement). To improve, give a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines and coastal landscapes because I like capturing contrasts in light. I especially enjoy doing this early in the morning when the light is soft.

提案: The answer attempts to state a preference but has grammar errors, hesitation and vague reasons. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons linked with words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid fillers and correct noun forms (e.g., 'views', 'offices').

例: I prefer urban views because the city skyline and illuminated buildings create interesting shapes and contrasts. Also, there is usually good lighting at dusk, which makes photos more dramatic.

提案: The response is unclear and contains pronunciation/word choice errors ('fuse' instead of 'views'), repetition, and vague reasons. Improve by clearly stating your preference, giving a specific example of a country, and explaining one or two concrete reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example').

例: I prefer views in other countries, for example Australia, because the landscapes and cultural scenes are different from home. When I visited as a child I remember unique coastal scenery and lively street markets, which inspired me to take more photos.

× Yes, I like taking a picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' is singular but 'different views' implies multiple images; use the plural 'pictures' for agreement between noun and modifier. Suggestion: match count: use 'a picture of a view' for singular or 'pictures of different views' for plural.

× A previous views in urban areas because in urban areas many office uh, the good city light and the sunny.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many offices, good city lights, and it is sunny.

Multiple issues apply but per instruction only address those in the list: 'views' is fine but 'A previous views' mixes singular article 'A' with plural noun 'views' (singular/plural error). Remove 'A' and use 'prefer' (tense/word choice) and correct count for 'office' to 'offices'. Also add 'there are' (There be issue) and plural forms 'lights'. Suggestion: Do not use singular articles with plural nouns; use 'a' with singular noun or no article with plural nouns.

× I prefer fuse in other country like uh, Australian.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, like Australia.

The phrase 'in other country' needs plural 'countries' or 'another country' and correct preposition 'in' is okay but the word 'fuse' is incorrect—likely 'views'. 'Like Australian' is adjective; use the noun 'Australia'. Suggestion: Use 'in other countries' for general preference, and use country names as nouns (Australia) or adjectives with nouns ('Australian cities').

× I I I was there when I was child in Australian because many. Culture Many.

✓ I was there when I was a child in Australia because there are many cultures.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' is an article error and tense 'was' is acceptable. 'Australian' used where noun 'Australia' is needed; 'many. Culture Many.' is fragmented. Also 'many cultures' is plural. Suggestion: Use 'when I was a child' and the country name 'Australia'; combine fragmented ideas into a complete sentence using 'because there are many cultures'.