Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatical and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I enjoy photographing different views.”), avoid fillers and repeated words, use correct verb forms and articles, and keep it to one or two sentences. Add a brief reason with a linking word if needed (e.g. “because…”).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me notice small details in the landscape.

提案: Give a clear choice in a grammatical sentence, avoid hesitation and incorrect possessives/pronouns. Use linking words to support your preference and provide specific reasons or examples (e.g. “because the architecture/greenery...” ). Keep responses to maximum five sentences. Correct singular/plural and adjective use (e.g. “the views are beautiful and dramatic”).

例: I prefer rural areas because the open countryside and greenery are relaxing, and I can capture dramatic natural scenes like rolling hills at sunset.

提案: Give a direct answer and then one or two specific reasons with clear grammar. Avoid vague repetition and incorrect phrasing. Use linking words such as “because” and give concrete examples or comparisons (e.g. famous sites, familiar scenes). Keep sentences short and accurate.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with its landscapes, such as the coastal cliffs and historic towns, which make my photos more meaningful.

× Yes, I like it that to taking a picture of of a different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

Errors: extra words and wrong prepositions/word forms. 'like it that to taking' is ungrammatical; use 'like' + gerund 'taking'. 'a picture of of a different views' has duplicated 'of', incorrect article 'a' with plural 'views' and wrong adjective 'different' placement. Correction: 'taking pictures of different views' uses plural 'pictures' to match 'views' and removes extra words. Suggestion: after 'like' use gerund form (taking), ensure articles agree with singular/plural, and avoid duplicate prepositions.

× Of course, I prefer your area because it, uh, the views is pretty beautiful and graphic. It can relax.

✓ Of course, I prefer my area because the views are very beautiful and picturesque. They are relaxing.

Errors: wrong pronoun 'your' (should refer to speaker's own area -> 'my'), unnecessary filler 'it, uh,' and redundant article 'the' before 'views' combined with singular verb 'is'. 'views' is plural so verb must be 'are' (subject-verb agreement). 'graphic' is not appropriate; 'picturesque' fits. 'It can relax' uses singular pronoun for plural subject and wrong verb form; use 'they are relaxing' or 'they relax me'. Suggestion: match pronouns to speaker, use plural verbs with plural nouns, choose appropriate adjectives, and express the relaxing effect with correct subject-verb structure.

× Of course I prefer reviews in my country because my country is beautiful. Use it have a beautiful views a beautiful places.

✓ Of course I prefer views in my country because my country is beautiful. It has beautiful views and beautiful places.

Errors: 'reviews' is wrong word (should be 'views'), and sentence 'Use it have a beautiful views a beautiful places' contains multiple issues: wrong initial 'Use', wrong verb 'have' form relative to subject 'it' (should be 'has'), article 'a' with plural nouns 'views' and 'places'. Correction uses 'It has beautiful views and beautiful places.' Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('views'), use correct verb form for third person singular ('has'), and omit or correct articles before plural nouns (no 'a' before plural).