Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence: a simple yes/no and brief reason. Avoid hesitations and repetitions. Use correct collocations (e.g., "take photos with my smartphone") and give one or two specific details (what kinds of views you take, when you take them). Keep your answer under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views with my smartphone. I especially like cityscapes and sunsets because the light makes buildings and the sky look dramatic. I take pictures when I travel or go for walks, so my phone has thousands of images from various places.

提案: Answer directly which you prefer and give a clear reason using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and fill words. Use specific vocabulary (e.g., "architecture," "landscapes"). Limit to maximum five sentences and include one supporting detail or example.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy architecture and the energy of city streets. For example, I like photographing historic buildings and modern skyscrapers when I visit downtown areas, which gives me a variety of shapes and textures to capture.

提案: Give a direct answer and explain with a specific reason using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid self-correction and repetition. Provide a concrete example of what you learn (e.g., historical sites, cultural details) to make the response more informative.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often have different histories and architectural styles. For instance, when I visit Europe I enjoy photographing old cathedrals and city squares, which teach me about local history and culture.

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✓ Yes, I do. I like taking photos with my smartphone. I have more than 50,000 pictures on my iPhone, so I definitely do.

The original contains repeated and fragmented phrases and missing connectors, which are sentence structure errors. Fix by removing redundancies ('taking off taking'), adding punctuation, and using correct prepositions ('with my smartphone', 'on my iPhone'). Also 'def I'm definitely uh' is filler; replace with 'I definitely do' for clarity. Ensure each independent clause is complete. Grammar problem type ID:26

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✓ I prefer views of other areas. That's because I'm fond of viewing architecture. I'm not familiar with the names of natural features, so that's why I prefer them.

The sentence has incorrect and awkward word choices and adjective/adverb use: 'all the view of other areas be' is ungrammatical, 'viewing architectures' should be 'viewing architecture' (architecture is usually uncountable), and 'names of nature' should be 'names of natural features'. Also use pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'views'. These changes correct word forms and improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× I prefer views and, uh, other countries when I or when they visit, uh, the views abroad, I can learn some new histories of these areas, these areas.

✓ I prefer views in other countries. When I visit abroad, I can learn new histories of those areas.

The original misuses prepositions and has unclear subjects. Use 'in other countries' not 'and other countries'. 'When I visit abroad' is the correct prepositional phrase; 'visit abroad' or 'travel abroad' works. Replace 'these areas, these areas' with 'those areas' to refer back correctly. This clarifies meaning and fixes preposition errors. Grammar problem type ID:11