Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答意思明确但语法和表达混乱；句子冗长且有词汇/搭配错误。建议：1) 使用1个主题句直接回答（如“Yes, I do”），2) 用1–2个简洁支持句说明原因，用恰当词汇（eg. remember special moments, relax）,3) 注意单复数和词序，避免重复（不要同时说 “taking pictures” 和 “trying taking photos”），4) 控制在不超过5句内并使用连接词（because, and, which）。

例: Yes, I do. I like taking photos because they help me remember special moments and places. I also find photography relaxing, and I enjoy sharing my favorite shots with friends on social media.

提案: 回答立场明确且有具体细节，但有语法时态和词汇错误，部分短语不自然（如 “rooftop values”）。建议：1) 保持主句现在时（I prefer），2) 用恰当名词（rooftop views, city parks），3) 用连接词（for example, because）连贯补充原因，4) 提供一个具体对比或例子来丰富内容。

例: I prefer urban views. For example, I love the city skyline at night because the lights and modern architecture look exciting. I also enjoy going to rooftop viewpoints and city parks to get different perspectives of the urban landscape.

提案: 回答思路可以，但有严重词汇错误和语法问题（如 “our times”, “completely nude” 误用）。建议：1) 明确主句并使用正确短语（sometimes I appreciate / other times I crave），2) 避免词汇搭配错误，用合适词汇表达（somewhere new），3) 用连接词解释原因并给出一两个具体例子，4) 控制句子长度以保持自然流畅。

例: I enjoy both local and foreign views. Sometimes I appreciate the comfort of familiar scenery at home, especially places I grew up with. Other times I crave the excitement of visiting somewhere new to experience different cultures and landscapes.

× Absolutely, I love taking pictures while I'm trying taking photos, helping me remember special moments and plays and I really enjoy sharing pictures on social media with friend. Photograph is relaxing how for me.

✓ Absolutely, I love taking pictures; trying to capture moments helps me remember special moments and places, and I really enjoy sharing pictures on social media with friends. Photography is relaxing for me.

句中出现了动词形式和结构混乱的问题（属于“动词 + -ing”以及动词不定式混用）。原句中“I'm trying taking photos”错误地把现在进行时与动名词连用，应改为“trying to capture”或直接用现在分词短语“trying to capture moments”。“plays”应为“places”，“friend”应为复数“friends”。“Photograph is relaxing how for me”语序与词性错误，正确应为“Photography is relaxing for me”。建议：区分动词不定式（to do）与动名词（doing）的用法，使用复数名词表示多个朋友，并保持句子主谓一致与常用搭配。

× I definitely prefer urban views, there's something about the city skyline at night with all the lights and interesting architecture that I found really exciting. I also enjoy rooftop values and the City Park because they show different.

✓ I definitely prefer urban views; there's something about the city skyline at night with all the lights and interesting architecture that I find really exciting. I also enjoy rooftops and the city park because they show different aspects.

句中时态不一致，前半句使用一般现在时“prefer”与从句中不应使用过去时“found”，应改为现在时“find”。另外，“rooftop values”用词不当，应改为“rooftops”，并且最后的“they show different”不完整，应补充宾语如“different aspects”。建议：保持时态一致（描述普遍喜好时用一般现在时），注意名词用法与完整表达。

× To be honest, I enjoy both local and foreign views. Each place has its own unique charm, so sometimes appreciate the comfort of familiar scenery, while our times I crave the excitement of exploring somewhere completely nude.

✓ To be honest, I enjoy both local and foreign views. Each place has its own unique charm, so sometimes I appreciate the comfort of familiar scenery, while other times I crave the excitement of exploring somewhere completely new.

原句存在代词/词汇错误和语序问题（应归入“错误使用代词/词汇”以及句子结构错误）。“sometimes appreciate”缺少主语，应补上“I”。“our times”错误，正确为“other times”。“nude”用词不当，语境应为“new”。建议：注意句子主语的完整性，使用恰当的词汇（new而非nude），并检查代词和短语（other times）。