Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, but a bit repetitive and could be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating similar ideas, and add one concrete example or reason. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word when adding detail.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset because the light makes the buildings look dramatic. I keep these photos on my phone so I can revisit those memories later.

提案: The idea is clear, but grammar, repetition and word choice errors make the answer confusing. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference (or that you like both), then use linking words (however, while, for example) and give one specific supporting detail for each. Correct plural/singular forms and avoid repeating words.

例: I enjoy both urban and rural views for different reasons. For example, urban scenes from rooftops look dramatic at dusk because of the lights and tall buildings, while rural landscapes are peaceful and full of natural colours, so I often photograph both to capture different moods.

提案: Your main point is good but the response has hesitations and some unclear phrasing. Remove filler words (uh), use a better linking phrase to give an example, and be more specific about what makes your country special. Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: I prefer views in my own country because there are still many places I want to explore. For example, our coastlines have dramatic cliffs and colourful beaches, so I have taken many photos there to capture those unique scenes.

× I keep many pictures on my phone because I like to capture everything I see.

✓ I keep many pictures on my phone because I like to capture everything I see.

No change needed; 'many pictures' and 'everything' are correct. (Included only because sentence contains plural nouns but no error.)

× I enjoy both urban area urban and rural views for different reasons.

✓ I enjoy both urban and rural views for different reasons.

Redundant and incorrect use of 'urban area urban' creates a singular/plural and repetition problem. Removing the extra words produces parallel noun phrases 'urban and rural views.' Ensure parallel structure when listing items.

× Urban views from rooftop and sky, sky curbs and be dramatic and exciting while rural areas landscape are more peaceful and natural and I often take photos of those this asenery.

✓ Urban views from rooftops and the sky can be dramatic and exciting, while rural landscapes are more peaceful and natural, and I often take photos of that scenery.

Multiple issues: missing plural forms ('rooftop' -> 'rooftops'; 'landscape' -> 'landscapes'); incorrect article use ('the sky'); incorrect verb form ('be' -> 'can be'); wrong word choice and duplication ('sky curbs' unclear removed); wrong demonstrative and spelling ('those this asenery' -> 'that scenery'). Corrections fix pluralization, article, modal verb usage to show possibility, and clear noun phrasing. Suggestion: break long sentence into clearer clauses and check singular/plural and article use.

× I prefer in my country because I think that there are many places that I don't know yet.

✓ I prefer my country because I think that there are many places I don't know yet.

The verb 'prefer' should take a direct object (prefer my country) or 'prefer to be in' if using 'in'. Removing 'in' before 'my country' corrects the structure. Also 'that' before 'I don't know yet' is optional; removing it makes the sentence more natural.

× Uh, for example, the coast of my country is really exciting and beautiful, so I have a lot of photos here there.

✓ For example, the coast of my country is really exciting and beautiful, so I have a lot of photos of it.

The phrase 'here there' is redundant and ungrammatical. Replace with 'of it' to refer back to 'the coast.' Also remove filler 'Uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use clear pronoun references and avoid redundant location words.