Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer first, then give one or two clear reasons with specific details. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., article use, plural agreement). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your answer coherent. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because my phone has an excellent camera that captures details well. For example, when I visit seaside or mountains I like to photograph the light and textures to remember the scene.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and one concrete example. Fix incomplete sentence endings and avoid vague phrases like 'I am open to.' Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' to improve coherence.

例: I prefer photographing rural views because I enjoy spending time in nature and capturing peaceful landscapes. For example, I often visit natural parks like Bolo Yedigula Lakes to photograph reflections on the water and the surrounding forests.

提案: Answer directly and avoid awkward phrasing. If you say 'it depends', briefly specify the dependency then give your general choice with reasons and a clear example. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., 'scenery' or 'landmarks' instead of 'beauties') and correct grammar (e.g., 'one of the most beautiful views').

例: It depends on the country, but generally I prefer taking photos in my own country because Turkey has diverse and historic scenery. For example, Istanbul’s skyline, with its mosques and Bosphorus views, offers unique photo opportunities.

× It's a good question yes absolutely.

✓ That's a good question; yes, absolutely.

Run-on and missing punctuation: the original lacks connectors and punctuation between clauses. Use a clearer linking phrase and proper punctuation to separate ideas. Suggestion: use 'That's' for 'That is' and a semicolon or period to separate responses.

× I like taking a different views of pictures due to the fact that I have a good phone and which has a good camera.

✓ I like taking different views of pictures because I have a good phone with a good camera.

Multiple issues: 'a different views' mixes singular article with plural noun (singular/plural issue) and 'due to the fact that' is wordy; 'and which has' is incorrect relative clause. Correction uses plural 'different views', replaces phrase with 'because', and uses 'with' to link phone and camera. Suggestion: keep noun and article consistent and use 'with' to show possession.

× I have iPhone 16 Pro Max and it has one of the best camera in the world.

✓ I have an iPhone 16 Pro Max, and it has one of the best cameras in the world.

Article and singular/plural errors: 'iPhone' needs the indefinite article 'an' and 'one of the best camera' should be plural 'cameras'. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sound and plural after 'one of the'.

× So also I would like to take a picture of everything when I see so yeah absolutely definitely like.

✓ So I would like to take a picture of everything I see, so yes, I definitely like it.

Run-on and missing object: original repeats connectors and omits 'it' after 'like'. Rearranged to remove redundancy and add object. Suggestion: avoid repeating conjunctions and include the object after 'like'.

× It's a good question, but actually I like taking a photo in the rural areas because I like to spend my time in nature and I would like to see new natural parks for example like Bolo Yedigula lakes and I am open to.

✓ That's a good question. Actually, I prefer taking photos in rural areas because I like spending time in nature and visiting new natural parks, for example Bolo Yedigulıa Lakes, and I am open to other places.

Multiple issues: 'a photo in the rural areas' mixes article with noun and 'the rural areas' unnecessary article; tense/verb form improvements: 'like to spend' -> 'like spending'; awkward phrase 'for example like' is redundant; sentence ends abruptly 'I am open to'. Corrected to coherent sentence and fixed pluralization and phrasing. Suggestion: use plural 'photos', remove unnecessary articles, avoid redundant words, and finish thoughts.

× Especially it depends on which country we are talking about.

✓ It especially depends on which country we are talking about.

Word order: 'Especially' is better placed after subject for natural emphasis. Original word order is awkward. Suggestion: place adverbs where they clearly modify the clause.

× But if I need to generalize, I would like to take a picture in my country because Turkey has a lot of beautiful beauties.

✓ But if I need to generalize, I would prefer to take pictures in my country because Turkey has a lot of beautiful places.

Awkward noun 'beautiful beauties' is incorrect; use 'places'. Also 'would like to take a picture' sounds like single picture; 'prefer to take pictures' fits general preference. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns like 'places' and plural 'pictures' for general statements.

× For example, taking a photo in Istanbul is the one of the most beautiful view in the world.

✓ For example, taking a photo in Istanbul is one of the most beautiful views in the world.

Article and singular/plural errors: remove extra 'the' before 'one', and 'view' should be plural 'views' after 'one of the'. Suggestion: use 'one of the' + plural noun and omit extra articles.