Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more fluent and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct verb forms (e.g., 'taking pictures is a way to...'). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me capture memorable landscapes. For example, when I travel to the countryside I often photograph sunsets and rivers to remember the colors and atmosphere.

提案: Answer directly and use relevant vocabulary—avoid unrelated words or nonsense. Start with a clear preference (urban or rural), then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, also). Mention concrete details (mountains, forests, rivers). Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer rural areas because I love natural landscapes and fresh air. For example, I enjoy walking in the mountains and photographing forests and rivers, which feel peaceful and beautiful.

提案: Give a clear, natural response: state your preference and support it with specific reasons or examples. Avoid unrelated words. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer views in my country because...') and specific vocabulary (scenery, landscapes, landmarks). Keep it concise (2–4 sentences) and coherent with linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: I prefer views in my own country because China has a wide variety of scenery, from mountains to coastlines. For example, I enjoy photographing the karst hills in Guilin and the coastal sunsets near my hometown.

× Yeah, I really like it. Uh, because take pictures, uh, is, uh, is a way to mention, uh, to mention. Landscapes.

✓ Yeah, I really like it because taking pictures is a way to capture landscapes.

The student used the base verb 'take' after 'because' where a gerund (verb + -ing) is required to function as a noun (the subject of 'is'). Use 'taking pictures' to express the activity. Also 'mention' is incorrect in this context; 'capture' or 'record' are appropriate verbs for photographing landscapes. Remove unnecessary filler words for clarity. Suggested improvement: Practice using gerunds after verbs or prepositions when naming activities (e.g., 'I enjoy taking photos').

× Hippopotamus because I love natural landscapes. And uh. Uh, for example, I love my, I love mountain and the, uh.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I love natural landscapes. For example, I love mountains and forests.

The student said 'Hippopotamus' which is an irrelevant noun and likely a mispronunciation or wrong word. Replace it with 'I prefer rural areas' to answer the question. 'I love my, I love mountain' contains incorrect possessive and singular noun use; use the plural 'mountains' and remove the unnecessary 'my'. Also add 'forests' or another natural feature to complete the thought. Suggested improvement: Listen to the question and answer directly; use plural nouns for general categories (mountains, rivers, forests).

× Apple for wheels in my country because I'm, I'm from China and China is a, a big, a big country will have many, many, uh, beautiful, uh, scenery.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I'm from China, and China is a big country with many beautiful sceneries.

The original sentence contains nonsense words ('Apple for wheels') and a wrong verb structure 'will have' when describing a general fact about the country. Use 'prefer views in my country' to answer. Use 'with' to connect 'a big country' and 'many beautiful sceneries'. Note: 'scenery' is usually uncountable; better phrasing is 'many beautiful scenic places' or 'many beautiful landscapes'. Suggested improvement: Use 'with' to link characteristics and avoid future tense 'will have' when stating a general truth about a place.