Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant but slightly repetitive (repeating 'love') and has minor grammatical issues ('video' should be 'videos', and 'do all my best' → 'do my best'). Make the structure clearer by starting with a topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail (what you enjoy or a recent example). Keep it under five sentences and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I do. I'm a photographer, so I enjoy capturing different views because each scene offers a unique mood and lighting. For example, I recently photographed a sunrise that revealed subtle colors you don't notice during the day, which made the shoot very rewarding.

提案: The main idea is clear, but speech fillers ('uh', 'to be honest', 'yeah') and informal phrases ('chill', 'do whatever you want it') reduce fluency and accuracy. Improve by using one clear topic sentence and two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'). Correct grammar ('a chill place', 'go for a run'). Limit filler words and keep it concise.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and let me relax after busy city life. Also, the open spaces and natural scenery give me more opportunities to take varied landscape shots, and I can go for a run or explore without crowds.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains several grammatical and coherence problems ('I reached in Spain', 'I chose for Spanish'). Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and a brief example. Avoid vague phrases and make sure sentences are grammatically correct. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to compare.

例: I prefer views in Spain, although I enjoy travelling elsewhere. Spain appeals to me because of its warm weather, diverse landscapes and friendly people, for example the coastal light there makes seascape photography much more vibrant than in some other countries.

× I'm a photographer and I love to take photos and video and then I try to do all my best to get the best shot.

✓ I'm a photographer and I love taking photos and videos, and I try to do my best to get the best shot.

Use the gerund 'taking' after 'love' for natural collocation. 'Video' should be plural 'videos' to match 'photos' (parallel nouns). 'Do all my best' is non-idiomatic; correct phrase is 'do my best'. Combine clauses with commas and 'and' for clarity.

× Because it's more, uh, chill place where you can relax, enjoy the environment.

✓ Because it's a more relaxed place where you can relax and enjoy the environment.

'Chill' is informal and used incorrectly as an adjective here; 'relaxed' fits better. Missing article 'a' before 'more relaxed place'. Add 'and' to join verbs 'relax' and 'enjoy' correctly.

× And then, yeah, it's, you can do everything.

✓ And then, yeah, you can do almost anything there.

Original sentence has poor structure with unnecessary 'it's,' making it ungrammatical. Replace with 'you can do almost anything there' for natural meaning and correct syntax.

× Just go to run, do whatever you want it.

✓ Just go for a run or do whatever you want.

'Go to run' is incorrect; use 'go for a run'. 'Do whatever you want it' wrongly includes object 'it'; remove 'it'. This fixes verb-preposition collocation and pronoun misuse.

× To be honest, I was in Spain but I love other countries.

✓ To be honest, I have been to Spain, but I love other countries.

Use present perfect 'have been to' for life experience relevant now, rather than simple past 'was in'. 'Was in Spain' can be used for specific past events, but here 'have been to Spain' fits better with 'I love other countries'. Also 'to' after 'been' is required for visiting a country.

× I'm not saying other countries less than Spain, but I reached in Spain.

✓ I'm not saying other countries are less than Spain, but I've been impressed by Spain.

Original contains ungrammatical phrases: 'other countries less than Spain' needs a verb 'are'. 'I reached in Spain' is incorrect — likely intended 'I arrived in Spain' or 'I was impressed by Spain'. Here 'I've been impressed by Spain' matches context better.

× The weather is good, environment, people who surround it.

✓ The weather is good, the environment is pleasant, and the people around it are friendly.

Original lists nouns without necessary verbs or articles and uses 'surround it' awkwardly. Add 'the' before 'environment' and 'the people around it' with verb 'are' to form complete, grammatical clauses.

× I chose for Spanish.

✓ I chose Spain.

'Choose' does not take the preposition 'for' when selecting a country; say 'I chose Spain' or 'I chose Spanish' if referring to the language. Use direct object without 'for' for correct verb-preposition usage.