Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve etkili hale getirmek için kısa, doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurun ve ardından neden sevdiğinizi belirten 1–2 destekleyici cümle ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları (ör. "I like it. I like...") kaldırın. Ayrıca bağlaçlar veya sebep belirten ifadeler (because, so, therefore) kullanarak akışı geliştirin.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me capture the atmosphere of a place. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to catch the changing colors.

提案: Cümle yapınızı ve telaffuzu düzene sokun; konu cümlenizi açıkça verin ("I prefer rural areas") ve ardından nedenini tam cümlelerle açıklayın. Bağlaçlar (because, so, and) kullanarak mantıklı bir akış sağlayın. Detay verirken somut örneklerle destekleyin ve cümleleri 3–4'ten fazlaya çıkarmamaya dikkat edin.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural landscapes and peace. For instance, I like photographing fields and forests since they offer varied textures and natural light.

提案: Cevabınızı net bir konu cümlesiyle başlatın (ör. "I would prefer views in other countries, but...") ve ardından çelişkiyi (tercih vs. gerçek durum) mantıklı şekilde bağlayın. Açıklayıcı nedenler ve örnekler verin. Kısa ve tam cümleler kullanarak karışıklığı ve tekrarları azaltın.

例: I would prefer views in other countries because I’m curious about different landscapes and cultures. However, since I rarely travel abroad, I usually photograph interesting scenes in my own country, such as coastal cliffs or old towns.

× I prefer a rural, I prefer weaves in rural areas. I like nature because. Very interesting and.

✓ I prefer rural areas. I like nature because it is very interesting.

The original contains fragmented and run-on sentences and incorrect word choice: 'a rural' is incomplete (needs noun 'area'), 'weaves' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'views', and 'I like nature because.' is a sentence fragment. Combine ideas into complete sentences and use the correct noun form. Suggestion: use 'I prefer rural areas' and follow with a complete clause explaining why ('because it is very interesting').

× I prefer this in. Other countries, but I don't go to other countries. Then I weave in my own country.

✓ I prefer to see views in other countries, but since I don't travel abroad, I take photos in my own country.

Problems include incorrect pronoun and preposition use ('I prefer this in. Other countries' is fragmented), incorrect verb 'weave' instead of 'we take/see' or 'take photos', and disfluent sentence structure. Use 'prefer to see views in other countries' to express preference, 'travel abroad' for going to other countries, and 'take photos' for photographing. Combine clauses for clarity and grammatical completeness.