Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rõ ràng và tự nhiên, nhưng để đạt điểm cao hơn bạn nên: 1) Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (ví dụ: số nhiều của “picture” là “pictures”); 2) Sử dụng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn rồi phát triển bằng chi tiết cụ thể; 3) Dùng liên từ phù hợp để làm mạch văn trôi chảy hơn (e.g., “for example”, “also”); 4) Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu. Ví dụ, nêu một kỷ niệm cụ thể hoặc một kiểu cảnh bạn thích chụp để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy taking pictures when I travel with my family because photos help me remember special moments. For example, last summer I captured a sunrise over a mountain, which reminds me of how peaceful that morning felt. Also, taking photos casually helps me relax and notice small details I would otherwise miss.

提案: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng câu trả lời hơi mơ hồ và có một vài lỗi cấu trúc. Bạn nên: 1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer...); 2) Giải thích lý do cụ thể với ví dụ (ví dụ: màu sắc bầu trời, ánh đèn ban đêm); 3) Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (e.g., “because”, “so”); 4) Sửa một số từ không chính xác (ví dụ: “taking pictures of the areas” → “taking pictures of areas” hoặc “urban or rural areas”).

例: I prefer rural scenery to urban views because I enjoy wide open skies and quiet night scenes. For instance, I like photographing the stars and colorful sunsets in the countryside because they feel more peaceful. Also, urban areas can be busy and distract from the natural beauty I want to capture.

提案: Câu trả lời trung thực và rõ ràng, nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách nêu dự đoán cụ thể và rút gọn câu để tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên: 1) Dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn (I prefer... hoặc I can't compare...); 2) Nêu một mong muốn cụ thể khi đi nước ngoài (ví dụ: muốn chụp núi, bờ biển, kiến trúc); 3) Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý (e.g., “however”, “so”).

例: I can't really compare because I've never traveled abroad, but I hope to see views in other countries in the future. For example, I would love to photograph coastal cliffs in Europe and famous city skylines in Asia. Hopefully, when I have more time and money, I will travel overseas to broaden my perspective and take many photos.

× Firstly, taking picture of different views can remind me of the good memory with that destination and secondly, by taking picture casually I can get myself chilled and relaxed.

✓ Firstly, taking pictures of different views can remind me of the good memories of that destination, and secondly, by taking pictures casually I can get myself chilled and relaxed.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because it refers to multiple images; this is a singular/plural error. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' because you refer to more than one recollection. Use 'of that destination' instead of 'with that destination' to show possession/association. Also ensure parallel structure by repeating 'taking pictures' for both clauses. Suggested improvement: always check whether a noun refers to one or many and use appropriate prepositions for relationships. Suggested corrections applied: picture -> pictures, memory -> memories, with -> of, maintain parallel structure.

× Personally, I'm not really into taking pictures of the areas, I just really want to take pictures of the scenery such as the sky or the night.

✓ Personally, I'm not really into taking pictures of areas; I just really want to take pictures of scenery such as the sky or the night.

The phrase 'of the areas' is unnatural; 'of areas' or better 'taking pictures of areas' can be used but article 'the' is unnecessary. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join two independent clauses; a comma splice is present. Also 'the scenery' can be simplified to 'scenery'. Suggested improvement: remove unnecessary articles and avoid comma splices by using a semicolon or 'but'/'and'.

× I haven't been to any other country, so I can't say whether I prefer views in Vietnam or abroad, but in the near future, if I have more time and money, I will definitely travel overseas to see more views and widen my knowledge.

✓ I haven't been to any other country, so I can't say whether I prefer views in Vietnam or abroad, but in the near future, if I have more time and money, I will definitely travel overseas to see more views and broaden my knowledge.

'Widen my knowledge' is understandable but non-idiomatic; the correct collocation is 'broaden my knowledge' which is an adjective/verb choice issue (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). The rest of the sentence uses present perfect 'haven't been' correctly and future 'will' correctly. Suggested improvement: use common collocations like 'broaden my knowledge' for natural English.