Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha açık ve doğrudan olmalı. Konu cümlesiyle başlayın, karışık ifadelerden kaçının ve gereksiz gerilemeleri ("him", "animal") düzeltin. Bağlaçlar veya kısa açıklamalar kullanarak neden fotoğraf çekmeyi sevdiğinizi belirtin. Örneğin: neden farklı açılardan çekim yapmayı tercih ettiğinizi ve hangi tür manzaraların ilginizi çektiğini net bir şekilde açıklayın.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I like exploring varied perspectives. For example, I often shoot both wide landscape shots and close-up details to capture the scene's atmosphere and unique shapes.

提案: Cevap kısa ve daha doğru kelime seçimiyle güçlendirilmeli. "Confident" ve "animal" gibi yanlış kelimeler yerine uygun sıfatlar kullanın (ör. peaceful, relaxing, natural). Bir bağlaçla tercihinizi destekleyen nedenler ekleyin ve en fazla beş cümle kullanın.

例: I prefer rural views because they are more peaceful and relaxing. In the countryside you can enjoy natural scenery, open skies and sunlight, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

提案: Cevabınızı net bir tercih ile başlayıp, mantıklı sebeplerle destekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve çekincelerden kaçının. Eğer dezavantaj belirtilecekse, kısa bir karşılaştırma yaparak açıklayın (ör. ışık kirliliği nedeniyle gökyüzünü daha az görebilirim).

例: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the landscapes and they feel comfortable to me. However, one drawback is that in some areas light pollution makes it harder to see stars and the moon clearly.

× Yes, I can take pictures, uh, with in front of him or back him.

✓ Yes, I can take pictures in front of it or behind it.

The student misused prepositions and pronouns. Use 'in front of' and 'behind' for positions; 'with in front of' is incorrect. Also 'him' should be 'it' for an animal or object. Improve by learning common prepositional phrases for location and matching pronouns to the referent: 'in front of it' and 'behind it'.

× Why I said him? Because it's uh, like a animal in shape on a.

✓ Why did I say 'him'? Because it's, uh, shaped like an animal.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun use and word order. Use the auxiliary 'did' for past question form: 'Why did I say...'. 'A animal' should be 'an animal' (article). 'In shape on a' is incorrect word order; use 'shaped like an animal'. Improve by using correct question structure and concise descriptive phrases.

× I think rural is more confident and more, uh, relaxing animal, uh, natural or some sun you can see uh, the sky.

✓ I think rural areas are calmer and more relaxing, more natural, where you can see the sun and the sky.

Multiple preposition and word choice errors: 'rural is' should be 'rural areas are' (plural and subject clarity). 'More confident' is incorrect collocation; use 'calmer'. 'Relaxing animal' is nonsensical; likely meant 'relaxing' as adjective. 'Some sun you can see the sky' is jumbled; correct to 'where you can see the sun and the sky'. Improve by choosing appropriate collocations and arranging descriptive clauses with relative words like 'where'.

× My own country is actually right, definitely uh good and I like this uh, I can see, see uh, or sky, but just bad thing uh, I can't see some umm, star or moon.

✓ My own country is actually really good and I definitely like it because I can see the sky, but the only bad thing is that I can't always see the stars or the moon.

Errors include article and singular/plural issues: 'right' used incorrectly -> 'really'; 'I like this' should be 'I like it' (pronoun reference). 'See some umm, star or moon' needs plural 'stars' and proper article 'the moon' or 'the stars'. Also add 'always' or a qualifier to explain inability to see them. Improve by using correct adverbs ('really'), consistent pronouns, and correct pluralization for countable nouns.