Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but slightly wordy and repetitive ("feel at peace" and "completely satisfied and happy"). Keep responses natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Add one specific example to make it more vivid and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel. For example, last year I photographed a coastal sunrise where the colours and reflections made the scene unforgettable. Because of scenes like that, I find landscape, streetscape and cityscape photography very calming.

提案: Good direct response and contrast. To improve, combine similar ideas to avoid repetition (you repeat "nature") and add a brief reason with a linking word for coherence.

例: I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones because I enjoy mountains and fresh air. For instance, hiking in the hills lets me photograph wildlife and wide-open landscapes, which I find more relaxing than busy city scenes.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical errors and lacks clarity in the example. Avoid filler words like "Honestly" and correct sentence structure ("it makes me excited whenever I try to visit them" is awkward). Provide a specific detail about what you liked in those countries and use a linking word to connect the lists.

例: I prefer views in other countries because visiting new places exposes me to different landscapes and cultures. For example, in Japan I enjoyed tranquil temple gardens, while in Thailand the coastal sunsets were especially beautiful, and in Taiwan I loved the mountain terraces.

× I enjoy particularly the beautiful landscape of nature, streetscapes and cityscapes.

✓ I particularly enjoy the beautiful landscapes of nature, streetscapes, and cityscapes.

'Particularly' should come before the verb 'enjoy' for natural word order. Use plural 'landscapes' to match list of multiple types. Add commas between list items and before 'and' for clarity.

× It makes me feel at peace and completely satisfied and happy.

✓ It makes me feel at peace, completely satisfied, and happy.

Place commas to separate coordinated adjectives/phrases. No quantifier error per se but the sentence needs clearer separation; restructuring improves fluency.

× I actually prefer views in rural areas compared to urban areas.

✓ I actually prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas.

Use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A compared to B'. Also 'those' refers back to 'views' to avoid repetition.

× Although urban areas offer a colorful city vibe, I am more into nature.

✓ Although urban areas offer a colorful city vibe, I am more into nature.

Sentence is acceptable; no article change needed. However, 'city vibe' could be pluralized as 'city vibes' for naturalness. This suggestion is optional.

× I prefer mountains, fresh air, nature and animals.

✓ I prefer mountains, fresh air, nature, and animals.

Add a comma before 'and' for a clear list. Items are correctly plural/singular as given.

× Honestly, I prefer views in foreign countries because they offer varied culture and it makes me excited whenever I try to visit them.

✓ Honestly, I prefer views in foreign countries because they offer varied cultures, and visiting them excites me.

Use plural 'cultures' to match 'varied'. Combine clauses and use active phrasing 'visiting them excites me' rather than 'it makes me excited whenever I try to visit them' for clarity and correct subject reference.

× Particularly, I visited Japan, Thailand and Taiwan and they I like the scenic.

✓ For example, I have visited Japan, Thailand, and Taiwan, and I liked the scenery there.

Original has word order and pronoun errors ('they I like the scenic'). Use present perfect 'have visited' to indicate experience; 'scenery' is the correct noun, and 'there' clarifies location. 'I liked' matches completed visits; present perfect 'have visited' with 'have liked' could also be used depending on nuance.