Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and well-structured: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), correct grammar (use gerunds: taking pictures), and provide one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I find photography relaxing because focusing on details like light and color helps me unwind. For example, when I photograph a lakeside at sunset, the changing colors and reflections always calm me down.

提案: Respond directly with a clear preference, use correct singular/plural and articles (e.g., 'rural areas' or 'the countryside'), reduce fillers, and add a specific reason or example using a linking word (because/so/for example).

例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they offer more natural scenery. For instance, in the countryside I can photograph fields, streams and trees, which feel more peaceful than city buildings.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence stating your preference, avoid repetition, fix grammar (e.g., 'I am a nature lover', 'taking pictures'), and provide one clear reason with a linking word (because/so) and a short example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer taking pictures in my own country because I am a nature lover and it is more affordable. For example, I can easily visit nearby national parks to photograph mountain views without spending much on travel.

× Definitely I like uh, a picture, uh, to take picture in for different places because, uh, it, it becomes you are relaxed and comfort.

✓ Definitely I like taking pictures in different places because it helps you relax and feel comfortable.

Errors: incorrect article usage ('a picture' and 'to take picture'), incorrect verb form and word order ('to take picture in for different places'), and wrong adjective/adverb choice ('relaxed and comfort'). This is a combination of singular/plural issues (use plural 'pictures' when speaking generally), verb form issues (use gerund 'taking' for preference), and incorrect adjective use ('comfortable' instead of 'comfort'). Suggestion: use the gerund after 'like' for activities, use plural for general statements, and use appropriate adjective forms. Grammar problem type IDs: 1 and 13.

× It gives you comfort and and also the scenery of a natural provides you the more relaxations when you are tired.

✓ It makes you feel comfortable, and natural scenery gives you more relaxation when you are tired.

Errors: incorrect word order ('scenery of a natural'), unnecessary article ('the more relaxations'), pluralization ('relaxations'), and duplicated 'and'. Use verb 'make' with 'feel comfortable' and noun phrase 'natural scenery'. Use uncountable 'relaxation' and 'more' without 'the'. Suggestion: simplify into two clear clauses and use correct noun/adjective order. Grammar problem type IDs: 13 and 26.

× I would like to prefer a rural areas over urban areas, uh, because in a rural areas there is a, a lot of natural, uh, sceneries and, uh, rural areas are very closest to the nature.

✓ I would prefer rural areas to urban areas because rural areas have a lot of natural scenery and are closer to nature.

Errors: incorrect article with plural ('a rural areas'), redundant phrasing ('would like to prefer' — use 'would prefer' or 'prefer'), pluralization ('sceneries' should be 'scenery' as an uncountable noun), and wrong comparative form ('very closest' should be 'closer'). Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y', use 'scenery' as uncountable, and use 'closer to nature'. Grammar problem type ID: 1.

× So there is a lot of scenes, uh, to take instead of the, uh, urban buildings just.

✓ So there are a lot of scenes to photograph, instead of just urban buildings.

Errors: subject-verb number agreement ('there is a lot of scenes' should be 'there are a lot of scenes'), plural noun form ('scenes' OK but 'a lot of scenes' must match verb), awkward phrasing ('to take' ambiguous — use 'to photograph'), and wrong word order for 'just'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use clear verb 'photograph' and place 'just' before the noun phrase it modifies. Grammar problem type IDs: 27 and 11.

× Definitely I would prefer a view in my country because, uh, if I want to take a pictures and uh, I am a natural, natural lover person.

✓ Definitely I would prefer to view my own country because if I want to take pictures, I am a nature lover.

Errors: awkward verb phrase ('prefer a view in my country' — use 'prefer to view' or 'prefer views in'), incorrect article with plural ('a pictures'), redundant wording ('natural, natural lover person' — use 'nature lover'). Suggestion: use 'take pictures' without 'a' and a concise noun 'nature lover'. Grammar problem type IDs: 6 and 1.

× So I would like to go in my own country because it's a, it's a affordable for me.

✓ So I would like to go to my own country because it's affordable for me.

Errors: incorrect preposition ('go in' should be 'go to'), article misuse ('a affordable' — 'affordable' does not need 'a'), and redundant filler words. Suggestion: use 'go to' for travel and omit the indefinite article before adjectives like 'affordable'. Grammar problem type IDs: 11 and 22.

× Other countries are not in my budget. So I.

✓ Other countries are not within my budget, so I do not choose them.

Errors: incomplete sentence ('So I.'), incorrect preposition ('in my budget' better as 'within my budget'), and fragmentary thought. Suggestion: finish the sentence with a clear verb phrase such as 'I do not choose them' or 'I cannot afford them'. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]}