Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Используйте более естественную структуру ответа: начните с короткого прямого утверждения, затем приведите одно-два конкретных примера. Избегайте повторов и ненужных слов (например, «speaking» и «taking pictures» несколько раз). Также следите за грамматикой: употребляйте артикли и правильные формы (например, "take pictures", не "take use of picture"). Попробуйте связки (because, so, for example) для логичности.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I walk around the city with my friends, I often photograph street scenes and architecture because I like capturing daily life and interesting details.

提案: Сформулируйте тему прямо и избегайте грамматических ошибок. Используйте связки для обоснования предпочтения и приведите конкретные причины или примеры (магазины, архитектура, удобства). Следите за согласованием: «I prefer urban areas» вместо «I prefer in urban areas», и избегайте повторов слова "beautiful".

例: I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the variety of architecture and the many shops. For instance, city streets often have interesting buildings and cafes, so I can take diverse photos and easily find places to relax.

提案: Отвечайте чётко и избегайте множественных повторов одного слова. Дайте конкретные причины, почему вам нравятся виды за границей (культура, архитектура, природа) и подкрепите примером. Обратите внимание на грамматику: «I prefer views in other countries» и полноценные придаточные предложения с союзами (because, so).

例: I prefer views in other countries because I like experiencing different cultures and landscapes. For example, when I travel abroad I often see unique architecture and exotic gardens that I can photograph, which makes my photos more varied.

× Francis speaking frankly speaking, yes, I love taking use of picture because it's very interesting for me.

✓ Francis, frankly speaking, yes, I love taking pictures because it's very interesting to me.

The sentence misuses 'taking use of picture' and has awkward repetition. Use plural 'pictures' for general activities (Singular and plural issue) and correct pronoun/phrase usage: 'interesting to me' is the standard collocation. Also add commas and remove repeated 'speaking' for clarity.

× When I go to the street with my friends, I take picture with them because I like taking pictures.

✓ When I go to the street with my friends, I take pictures with them because I like taking pictures.

The noun should be plural: 'take pictures' not 'take picture'. Use plural when speaking about repeated/general actions. Keep 'taking pictures' as a gerund phrase; it's correct to repeat but avoid redundancy in natural speech.

× Generally speaking, I prefer in urban areas because it's very beautiful.

✓ Generally speaking, I prefer urban areas because they are very beautiful.

The verb 'prefer' is not followed by the preposition 'in' in this context; use direct object 'urban areas'. Also 'it's' is singular and does not agree with plural 'urban areas' so use 'they are'.

× It's has many beautiful cities and shops.

✓ It has many beautiful cities and shops.

'It's' is a contraction of 'it is' which cannot combine with 'has' (it is has). Use 'It has' or better refer to 'urban areas have' depending on intended subject. Here 'It has' is corrected but consider 'Urban areas have many...'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Urban area is very comfortable for me.

✓ Urban areas are very comfortable for me.

Use plural 'Urban areas' or 'The urban area' with article. Also match verb to plural subject: 'are' instead of 'is'.

× I prefer in in other countries because in other countries very beautiful for me, and there are many beautiful cities and beautiful flowers and beautiful.

✓ I prefer other countries because they are very beautiful to me, and there are many beautiful cities and flowers.

Remove the incorrect repeated preposition 'in'. Use 'prefer other countries' (no 'in'). Add subject 'they are' for the clause and use 'beautiful to me' as standard collocation. Remove redundant 'beautiful' words to avoid repetition.