Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Устраните повторы и звуки-наполнители, используйте простые связные предложения. Начните с прямого ответа, затем дайте одно конкретное объяснение или пример. Избегайте фраз вроде «it's my interests» — используйте «it's my hobby» или «I'm interested in photography».

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I often take photos when I see beautiful scenes in my neighborhood, for example a colorful sunset or an interesting street mural.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ чётко: выберите одно предпочитание и поддержите его конкретными деталями. Уменьшите повторения и избегайте заполнителей («uh», «umm»). Используйте связки («because», «for example») для логики высказывания.

例: I prefer rural views because I love nature and sunsets. For example, when I go to the countryside I often photograph flowers, trees and wide landscapes because they look peaceful and colourful.

提案: Избегайте тавтологии и некорректной грамматики. Дайте чёткое утверждение и объяснение с конкретным примером. Уберите лишние слова и повторы («I I», «maybe»).

例: I prefer views in other countries because I find different landscapes and architecture inspiring. For example, when I visited Europe I photographed charming old streets and colourful gardens that I don't usually see at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different view views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'view' should be plural to match 'different' and 'pictures'. Use 'views' for multiple scenes.

× It's my umm, it's my interests.

✓ It's my interest.

'Interest' should be singular when referring to a general hobby or preference. 'Interests' is plural when listing multiple separate interests.

× And then in when I see some beautiful things in my, uh, in my society, I always take a picture of this thing because it's my interests.

✓ And when I see something beautiful in my neighborhood, I always take a picture of it because it's my interest.

Use 'when' without 'in' before it. 'Society' is not the natural word here; use 'neighborhood' or 'area'. Use singular 'something' and pronoun 'it'. Correct article and singular 'interest'.

× I love mostly I love nature, I love sunset, I love nature's view.

✓ I mostly love nature; I love sunsets and natural scenery.

'Mostly' should come before the verb phrase. 'Sunset' as a general preference should be plural 'sunsets'. 'Nature's view' is awkward; use 'natural scenery'.

× So in when I, when I, when I go in outside, I always, I often take a picture of some, uh, interesting flowers, maybe interesting objects and there.

✓ So when I go outside, I often take pictures of interesting flowers or objects there.

Use 'when I go outside' not 'go in outside'. 'Take pictures' (plural) matches frequency and multiple objects. 'There' should follow the clause naturally.

× I mostly prefer views in other countries because when I went to European countries I I saw some very interesting and fascinating views in outside the surround themselves with some maybe interesting pictures like flowers.

✓ I mostly prefer views in other countries because when I went to European countries I saw many fascinating views outside, often including things like flowers.

Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Went' is past and correct; simplify phrasing. 'In outside the surround themselves' is ungrammatical; use 'outside' and 'including'. Use 'many' instead of 'some very' for fluency.