Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn và tự nhiên. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (số ít/ số nhiều, động từ chia), dùng câu chủ đề, tiếp đó nêu lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, because, so). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

例: I don't really enjoy taking pictures of views because I prefer to experience places in person. For example, when I focus on taking photos I often miss interesting moments around me, so I try to observe with my eyes first.

提案: Cần rút gọn, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ vựng phù hợp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (I prefer...), giải thích rõ lý do bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể và kết thúc bằng kết luận. Dùng liên từ như because, so, therefore để kết nối ý.

例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and feel relaxed in nature. For instance, walking among rice fields and trees lifts my mood and helps me recharge.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc để câu rõ ràng hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (I can't choose between...), đưa ra 1-2 so sánh cụ thể (what's special at home vs abroad) và kết luận ngắn. Tránh lỗi như 'is have', dùng danh từ/động từ đúng chỗ.

例: I can't choose because every country has its own charm. For example, Vietnam offers lush landscapes and rich cultural scenery, whereas some European countries have historic architecture and distinct landscapes, so both are appealing.

× To be honest, I'm not a person who like taking picture of different views and I want to explore new things and seeing the sightings by myself.

✓ To be honest, I'm not a person who likes taking pictures of different views, and I want to explore new things and see the sights myself.

The relative clause 'who like' needs third-person singular verb 'likes' to agree with 'a person' (subject-verb agreement). 'Taking picture' should be pluralized to 'taking pictures' (singular/plural issue). 'Seeing the sightings' is redundant and unidiomatic; use 'see the sights' and remove the reflexive 'by myself' which is better as 'myself'. Suggestions: Use 'who likes', pluralize countable nouns when appropriate, and prefer 'see the sights myself' for natural phrasing.

× So if I spend time on smartphone or something like that, I will miss some real experience.

✓ So if I spend time on my smartphone or something like that, I will miss some real experiences.

'Smartphone' as a singular, specific device requires an article or possessive: 'my smartphone'. 'Real experience' is better as plural 'real experiences' when speaking generally. Suggestions: Use articles/possessives with singular countable nouns and pluralize when referring to general experiences.

× I'm a person who was raised in rural areas and I really love the nature and I really want to touch the nature.

✓ I'm a person who was raised in a rural area, and I really love nature and really want to be close to it.

'Rural areas' is acceptable but 'a rural area' is more natural with 'a person who was raised'. 'The nature' is incorrect: 'nature' is uncountable and does not take 'the' in this general sense. 'Touch the nature' is unidiomatic; use 'be close to it' or 'experience nature'. Suggestions: Use 'nature' without 'the' and choose natural verbs like 'experience' or 'be close to' instead of 'touch.'

× So if I have a chance I will prefer to see the views in rural areas because I can see the nature and feel the nature is really make my mood up.

✓ So if I have a chance, I would prefer to see the views in rural areas because I can see nature and being in nature really lifts my mood.

'I will prefer' is awkward; 'I would prefer' is more natural for hypothetical situations (modal/tense nuance). 'See the nature' should be 'see nature' (no article). 'Feel the nature is really make my mood up' has multiple errors: incorrect verb forms and word order. Use 'being in nature really lifts my mood.' Suggestions: Use conditional 'would prefer' for hypothetical preferences, omit articles with 'nature', and use correct verb phrases like 'lifts my mood.'

× I think every country is have their own beauty.

✓ I think every country has its own beauty.

'Every country' is a singular subject and requires singular verb 'has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Their' is a plural possessive; with singular 'every country' use 'its'. Suggestions: Use 'has' and 'its' with 'every + singular noun.'

× For example in Vietnam have this advantage in natural beauties and the beauty relate to the culture.

✓ For example, Vietnam has the advantage of natural beauty, and that beauty is related to the culture.

Missing subject and verb: 'Vietnam have' is incorrect; use 'Vietnam has' (subject-verb agreement). 'Natural beauties' is awkward—use uncountable 'natural beauty' or 'natural attractions.' 'The beauty relate' needs 'relates' to agree with singular 'beauty.' Suggestions: Include the verb 'has,' use 'natural beauty,' and ensure verb agrees with its subject.

× But if I went to some country in Europe for example, spend, the beauty is much more different.

✓ But if I went to some countries in Europe, for example, the beauty would be quite different.

Mixes tenses and has extraneous word 'spend.' Use conditional structure: 'If I went to some countries in Europe... the beauty would be quite different.' 'Much more different' is unnatural; use 'quite different.' Suggestions: Remove stray words, use correct conditional tense and natural modifiers.

× So it's really difficult for me to choose which.

✓ So it's really difficult for me to choose which one.

The sentence lacks an object after 'which.' Add 'one' to complete the reference. Suggestions: Use 'which one' or 'which to choose' to make the sentence grammatically complete.