Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce filler words (uh) and give a clearer, slightly longer answer with one specific example. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a supporting detail and a brief reason using a linking word.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I go out with my family to the seaside, I often photograph the coastline because the changing light creates beautiful colors. This helps me keep memories and improve my photography skills.

提案: Avoid repetition and correct grammar (singular/plural). Give one or two specific features you like in rural areas and use a linking word to connect ideas for coherence.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer open landscapes and fresh air. For instance, I enjoy walking through fields and photographing rolling hills, which feels more peaceful than busy city streets.

提案: Remove filler words, combine ideas to avoid repetition, and add a concrete example of a country or scene you enjoyed. Use a linking word to show reason or result.

例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me discover different landscapes and cultures. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed traditional gardens and mountaintop views, which created lasting memories and broadened my perspective.

× Yes, I like to take pictures, uh, when I go out with my friends, uh, or with my family, uh, I like to take pictures of myself and uh, and the nature as well.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures when I go out with my friends or with my family; I like taking pictures of myself and of nature as well.

The verb 'like' commonly pairs with the gerund form for habitual actions (like taking) rather than the infinitive 'to take' in natural spoken English. Also, reduce redundancy (remove repeated 'uh' and duplicate 'and'), and use 'of nature' without the definite article. Suggestion: use gerunds for habits and streamline filler words. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× Well I prefer a rural areas because they have fantastic views of environment and I like the nature, so I prefer a rural area.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because they have fantastic views of the environment and I like nature, so I prefer a rural area.

There is a mismatch between the singular article 'a' and the plural noun 'areas' ('a rural areas' is incorrect). Use either 'a rural area' (singular) or 'rural areas' (plural) consistently. Also 'views of environment' needs the definite article 'the environment' or simply 'nature'; 'the nature' is incorrect in this context. Suggestion: choose singular or plural and adjust articles accordingly. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Well I prefer a rural areas because they have fantastic views of environment and I like the nature, so I prefer a rural area.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because they have fantastic views of the environment and I like nature, so I prefer a rural area.

The phrase 'views of environment' requires the definite article 'the environment' to refer to the natural surroundings. Additionally, 'the nature' is not used when speaking generally about nature; use 'nature' without an article. Suggestion: use 'the environment' for a specific idea of surroundings or 'nature' without 'the' for the general concept. Grammar problem type ID: 17

× I prefer views in other countries because I like to explore more and I like to, uh, get more pictures of the view of other countries so it creates memories.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I like exploring more and getting more pictures of those views, so it creates memories.

'Pictures of the view of other countries' is awkward: 'view' should be plural 'views' when referring generally, and 'of other countries' is better replaced by 'those views' for clarity. Also use gerunds 'exploring' and 'getting' to express habitual actions more naturally. Suggestion: use plural 'views' for general references and prefer gerunds for likes/habits. Grammar problem type ID: 1