Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid filler phrases like "and so on" and repetitive wording.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially natural scenes. For example, I love photographing flowers and rivers because their colors and textures change with the seasons, and I usually take many pictures when I go on outings to capture those moments.

提案: Improve grammar and coherence: give one clear preference statement, then support it with specific, well-formed reasons. Remove hesitations ("umm") and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "for example".

例: I prefer rural views because villages have more trees and open crop fields, which feel peaceful. For example, I enjoy walking by rivers and looking at farmland landscapes, which are more relaxing than busy city streets.

提案: Clarify your position and correct facts and grammar: state whether you prefer one over the other or both, then give two clear, accurate examples with correct names and brief descriptions. Avoid listing unclear or incorrect place names.

例: I like views both in my own country and abroad because each place offers something different. For instance, in my country we have the Sundarbans, the world’s largest mangrove forest, and the popular island of St. Martin, both of which offer unique coastal scenery.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views and I get excited when I see some natural views like flowers, rivers and so on. So whenever I go for outing I do take a lot of pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views and I get excited when I see natural scenes like flowers and rivers. So whenever I go out I take a lot of pictures.

The phrase 'do like' is grammatically acceptable but redundant in simple statements; use simple present 'like'. 'Some natural views' is awkward — use 'natural scenes' or 'natural views' without 'some'. 'Go for outing' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'go out' or 'go on an outing'. 'Do take' is unnecessary emphasis—use 'take'. Use simple present to describe habitual actions. Suggestions: remove unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in affirmative statements, replace 'for outing' with 'out' or 'on an outing', and prefer concise nouns like 'scenes'.

× I do prefer views from the rural rural areas. I love to go to village because it has there are a lot of trees and natural resources like rivers, umm crop fields and all.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas. I love going to villages because there are a lot of trees and natural features like rivers and crop fields.

'Prefer views from the rural rural areas' repeats 'rural' and uses 'from' awkwardly; the typical expression is 'prefer views in rural areas'. 'Go to village' should be 'go to a village' or 'go to villages'; using the gerund 'going' is more natural after 'love'. 'It has there are' is an ungrammatical blend; use 'there are' to state existence. 'Natural resources' is acceptable but 'natural features' fits scenic context better. Also remove filler 'umm' and 'and all'. Suggestions: use 'prefer X in Y', include articles with singular nouns ('a village'), or pluralize as needed, and use 'there are' to introduce plural items.

× I prefer views of my own country as well as the other countries. For example, my country have coxswain, which is world's largest mangrove sea beach, and we have St. Martin which is also a sea beach and we have Sioux.

✓ I prefer views in my own country as well as in other countries. For example, my country has Cox's Bazar, which is the world's largest mangrove sea beach; we also have St. Martin, which is another sea beach, and we have Kuakata.

'Prefer views of my own country' is acceptable but 'views in my own country' is more natural. 'My country have' is subject-verb disagreement; use 'my country has'. Proper nouns need correct forms: 'Cox's Bazar' (not 'coxswain') and 'Kuakata' perhaps intended as 'Sioux' seems incorrect; I changed to 'Kuakata' as a known Bangladeshi sea beach — confirm the intended place name. Use 'the world's largest' with definite article 'the'. Use commas or semicolons to separate items. Suggestions: ensure verb agrees with singular 'country' (has), verify and use correct place names, include articles where required ('the world's'), and keep parallel structure when listing places.