Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Nói rõ ràng hơn, dùng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và dùng từ vựng phù hợp. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn gọn trả lời trực tiếp (ví dụ: "Yes, I do."). (2) Thay thế những từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "green blaze") bằng các mô tả chính xác như "lush greenery" hoặc "vibrant colours". (3) Viết 2–3 câu hỗ trợ có nối từ (because, so, which) để giải thích lý do và cảm xúc. (4) Giữ tổng số câu không quá 5 và tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "like" nhiều lần).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing places such as beaches, mountains and forests because of their lush greenery and striking colours. Taking pictures of these scenes makes me feel calm and relaxed, so I often spend time outdoors to capture different light and perspectives.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích rõ ràng với lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng như "I prefer rural areas." (2) Tránh từ lặp lại ("green green"). (3) Giải thích vì sao bằng cấu trúc có nối từ (because, as, so) và cung cấp một ví dụ ngắn (ví dụ: "I enjoy walking among trees in the morning"). (4) Sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (sử dụng thì đúng, danh từ/đại từ phù hợp).

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy fresh air and open green spaces. For example, I like walking through fields and forests early in the morning, which helps me relax and clear my mind.

提案: Cải thiện: Trả lời rõ ràng về sở thích (nước mình hay nước khác) rồi mô tả cụ thể và so sánh ngắn gọn. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề như "I prefer views in my country" hoặc "I enjoy both..." (2) Nêu vài ví dụ cụ thể về địa điểm và những đặc điểm khiến bạn thích (mountains, beaches, climate). (3) Dùng liên từ để nối ý (and, while, but) và tránh câu rời rạc. (4) Sửa ngữ pháp và thứ tự từ để câu tự nhiên hơn.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Vietnam, because it has many beautiful beaches and high mountains. However, I also enjoy visiting places like China or Thailand for their cultural scenery, and New Zealand for its dramatic landscapes, so I like a mix of domestic and international views.

× I like taking picture of different view like a beach, mountain and somewhere like forest because they are green blaze and I very like it.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views, like beaches, mountains and places such as forests because they are green and beautiful and I like them very much.

The sentence needs present participle/plural forms and general corrections: 'picture' -> 'pictures' and 'view' -> 'views' (pluralization) (Grammar Problem Type ID 10 and 1 overlap but per list choose 10), and 'like a beach, mountain and somewhere like forest' is rephrased for natural English. 'green blaze' is incorrect word choice; changed to 'green and beautiful'. 'I very like it' is incorrect word order and collocation; corrected to 'I like them very much.' Use plural pronoun 'them' to match 'pictures/views'. Suggestions: use plural forms when referring to multiple items, place adverbs like 'very' after verb ('like them very much'), and choose appropriate adjectives.

× It have me comfortable and feel relaxed.

✓ They make me comfortable and feel relaxed.

Original uses incorrect subject-verb agreement: 'It have' should agree with plural antecedent 'pictures' or 'they' so use 'They make me comfortable and feel relaxed.' Also 'make me comfortable' is natural instead of 'have me comfortable'. Suggestions: ensure the verb agrees with the subject ('they make' not 'it have'), and use idiomatic verbs like 'make' for feelings.

× I report you in rural areas because I like green green spike and increase by I feel relaxed.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like the greenery and I feel relaxed there.

'report you in rural areas' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'prefer rural areas' so verb corrected. 'Green green spike and increase by' is ungrammatical; replaced with 'the greenery'. Also added 'there' to indicate location. Suggestions: use correct verbs for preferences ('prefer'), use 'there' for location, and use nouns like 'greenery' to describe plants.

× I like the air is rural areas and in there have some green trees like.

✓ I like the air in rural areas and there are some green trees there.

Original mixes structures and misuses pronouns and word order. Corrected to 'the air in rural areas' and added 'there are' for existence. Use 'there' at end to indicate location. Suggestions: use 'there are' for stating existence and 'in' for location ('in rural areas'). Avoid redundant words.

× I like hot. I like in my country is Vietnam and all the countries like China, Thailand and maybe in New Zealand.

✓ I like hot weather. I like my country, Vietnam, and other countries such as China, Thailand and maybe New Zealand.

'I like hot' is incomplete; specify 'hot weather'. 'I like in my country is Vietnam' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I like my country, Vietnam'. 'All the countries like' should be 'other countries such as'. Suggestions: complete ideas ('hot weather'), use apposition for country names ('my country, Vietnam') and 'such as' to give examples.

× There there are very beautiful and relaxed and in my country has a lot of mountain and beach line.

✓ They are very beautiful and peaceful, and my country has a lot of mountains and coastlines.

Duplicate 'There there' removed. Use subject 'They' to refer to places. 'Relaxed' used for people; 'peaceful' describes places. 'In my country has' is incorrect order; corrected to 'my country has'. Plurals: 'mountain' -> 'mountains', 'beach line' -> 'coastlines'. Suggestions: avoid double 'there', use correct word order ('my country has'), use plural nouns for multiple features, and choose appropriate adjectives for places.