Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên và rõ ràng hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (Yes, I do/No, I don’t), tránh dùng từ lặp và sửa ngữ pháp (use “of” not “about”). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về kỹ thuật hoặc cảm xúc và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

例: Yes, I do. For example, when I visit the beach I often take photos of the sea, the sand and the coastline because I like capturing the changing light at sunset. I usually focus on close-up textures like footprints or waves to make the pictures more interesting.

提案: Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng và ngữ pháp chính xác (use plural/singular correctly, e.g., “new buildings”). Tránh nói quá chung chung; nêu lý do cụ thể và dùng liên từ như “because” và “also” để liên kết ý. Giữ câu súc tích (1–3 câu).

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the modern architecture and well-designed public spaces. For example, I like photographing new buildings and city parks since they offer interesting shapes and vibrant street life.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng (singular/plural, collocations): nói “I prefer views in my country” or “I love the scenery in my country.” Tránh lặp từ (“very very”) và tiếng ồn như “uh”. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (a named place or typical scene) và dùng liên từ để mở rộng ý. Giữ đúng số câu.

例: I prefer the scenery in my own country because it offers diverse landscapes such as mountains, beaches and forests. For instance, I often visit the coastal cliffs near my hometown where the views are dramatic and great for photography.

× Yeah, and for example, when I went to the beach, I often took photos about the sea, sand and the view of the beach.

✓ Yeah, for example, when I went to the beach, I often took photos of the sea, the sand, and the view of the beach.

The student used the preposition 'about' incorrectly with 'took photos'; the correct preposition is 'of' (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Also add definite articles 'the' for specific nouns 'sand' and 'view' to sound natural (Article errors, ID 22). Maintain past tense 'went' and 'took' which is appropriate for the completed action. Suggestion: use 'photos of' and add 'the' before specific nouns. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Of course, I love views in urban areas because it's so modern and it has more views about parks, modern infrastructure and new building.

✓ Of course, I love views in urban areas because they are so modern and they include more views of parks, modern infrastructure, and new buildings.

The original sentence mixes singular 'it' with plural 'views' causing a subject-verb mismatch (Subject-pronoun agreement/Third person singular issue, ID 2 and 27). Use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'views' and plural verb forms 'are' and 'include'. Replace 'about' with 'of' to correctly link 'views' and objects (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Use plural 'buildings' and 'include' rather than 'has' to sound natural. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs in number and use 'views of'. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× I love view in my country because my countries have very very landscape about uh, mountain beaches, also forests.

✓ I love the views in my country because my country has very varied landscapes, such as mountains, beaches, and forests.

Multiple errors: 'view' should be plural 'views' (Singular and plural issue, ID 1). 'my countries' is incorrect if referring to one country; use 'my country' (Incorrect use of pronouns/nouns, ID 12/1). 'have very very landscape' is ungrammatical; use 'has very varied landscapes' (Article errors and adjective use, IDs 22 and 13). Replace 'about' with 'such as' or list the items directly (Incorrect use of prepositions, ID 11). Also change 'mountain beaches' to 'mountains, beaches' for clarity and correct noun forms. Suggestion: ensure nouns agree in number and use appropriate quantifiers/adjectives like 'varied landscapes' and list items with commas.