Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you enjoy it, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid redundancy ("everything" repeated) and correct awkward phrases (e.g. "Sundowns" is unusual — use "sunset" or "twilight"). Use linking words (because, for example) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I inherited the hobby from my grandfather, so I photograph landscapes like sunsets, beaches and rivers because they show beautiful colours and small details. For example, I often focus on the way light hits the water to capture mood and texture.

提案: Give a direct preference or a balanced answer with specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence (I prefer X, or I like both) and then support it with concrete reasons or examples, using linking words such as however or because to make it coherent. Avoid vague phrases like "the whole world is amazing" without examples.

例: I prefer rural views, but I also like city scenes occasionally. Rural landscapes often have peaceful light and natural textures, which I find easier to photograph, whereas urban areas provide interesting architecture and lively street scenes that create dynamic photos.

提案: Answer more directly and provide a reason. If you haven’t traveled much, say so briefly and then explain what you value about local views with specific examples. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid fillers like "I cannot answer fully."

例: I usually prefer views in my own country because I haven't travelled much. For example, I enjoy photographing local coastal towns and mountain paths since I know the best light and angles there, but if I travel abroad I would look for distinctive architecture and cultural scenes to photograph.

× To me the whole world is amazing, so I don't have a preferable view.

✓ To me the whole world is amazing, so I don't have a preferred view.

Preferable is an adjective that typically requires a comparison (e.g. 'more preferable than'), while preferred is the correct adjective to indicate personal preference. Use 'preferred' to express that something is favored or chosen. Suggestion: say 'preferred view' when stating a personal preference.

× I would like to take a picture of everything because I like to see the beauty in little details.

✓ I would like to take pictures of everything because I like to see the beauty in small details.

The sentence mixes singular 'a picture' with the general sense 'everything'; use the plural 'pictures' to match general habitual action. Also 'little details' is acceptable but 'small details' is more natural in this context. Suggestion: use plural when referring to repeated or general actions and choose the more idiomatic adjective 'small'.

× I cannot answer the question fully because I don't really travel a lot but I just take pictures every time non-stop in my country.

✓ I cannot answer the question fully because I don't really travel much, but I take pictures nonstop in my country.

'A lot' is acceptable but 'much' is more natural with the negative 'don't really travel'. 'Every time non-stop' is awkward; 'nonstop' (one word) is the correct adverb to indicate continuous action, and 'take pictures nonstop' is more idiomatic. Also add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'don't travel much' and 'take pictures nonstop' for clearer, more natural phrasing.

× The sunsets, the Sundowns, the seas, the rivers, I don't really care.

✓ The sunsets, the sundowns, the seas, the rivers — I don't really mind.

The clause 'I don't really care' is grammatically correct but sounds blunt and mismatches the positive context. Replacing with 'I don't really mind' is more idiomatic. Also 'Sundowns' is unusual capitalization; use lowercase 'sundowns' unless it's a proper noun. Suggestion: use 'mind' for neutral indifference and check capitalization.