Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/grammar errors (e.g., "Whenever I spot a view that is magical or stunning, I take a photo"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a brief reason or example.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. Whenever I spot a scene that looks magical or striking, I take a photo and often post it on my social media to share the atmosphere with friends.

提案: Open with a clear, direct statement of preference, then give a specific reason with a linking word. Correct grammatical issues (e.g., article use and word order) and avoid redundant phrases like "I think" and "really" repeated. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in urban areas. I especially like cityscapes at night because the lights create dramatic reflections and contrast, which makes photos more striking.

提案: Give a clear answer first, then support it with a specific example and correct grammar. Fix unclear words (e.g., "Fuse"), subject-verb agreement, and awkward phrases like "the views are static." Use linking words (e.g., "for example") and limit to 2–4 coherent sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it offers many diverse landscapes. For example, places like Bali have breathtaking beaches and dramatic sunsets that I find more memorable than many foreign locations.

× Whenever I spotted a different views that really magical really stunning, I will take the picture of it and I would boast immediately on my social media to show how beautiful the views, the kind of views I just captured.

✓ Whenever I spot different views that are really magical and really stunning, I take a picture of them and boast immediately on my social media to show how beautiful the views I just captured are.

The sentence uses plural 'views' with singular determiners and verbs. 'A different views' is incorrect; use 'different views' (no 'a') or 'a different view' (singular). Tense mixing: 'spotted' and 'will' conflict with habitual action—use present simple 'spot' and 'take'. Also use plural pronoun 'them' to match 'views' and include the verb 'are' for the adjective clause. Suggestion: keep subject and verb forms consistent and match singular/plural across nouns and pronouns.

× I just.

✓ I just do.

The fragment 'I just.' lacks a main verb; to complete the idea use a present simple verb 'do' for habitual actions. Ensure sentences have a full subject-verb structure. If intended as trailing off, in test context provide a complete clause.

× For my personal opinion, I prefer views in urban areas because I think urban areas just really beautiful especially at night because you can see a lot of many city lights and it just really stunning to the photos.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer views in urban areas because I think urban areas are really beautiful, especially at night, because you can see many city lights and they look really stunning in photos.

Use 'In my opinion' not 'For my personal opinion'. Missing verb 'are' after 'urban areas'. 'A lot of many' is redundant—use 'many' or 'a lot of'. 'It just really stunning to the photos' is incorrect: match plural subject 'city lights' with 'they' and use 'look' or 'are' and preposition 'in photos'. Suggestion: use correct introductory phrase, include linking verbs, avoid redundant quantifiers, and use correct preposition 'in photos'.

× I prefer Fuse and my own country because my own country have a really great views.

✓ I prefer my own country because my country has really great views.

'Fuse' appears to be a typo; removed. 'My own country have' is incorrect subject-verb agreement and pronoun use: 'country' is singular, so use 'has'. Also 'a really great views' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'views'—remove 'a' or use singular 'view'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with singular 'country' and match articles to singular/plural nouns.

× Like if you can see in Bali it just they have a really beautiful and breathtaking beach where the views are static and.

✓ For example, if you go to Bali, they have really beautiful, breathtaking beaches where the views are spectacular.

The original sentence has unclear structure and extra words: 'Like if you can see in Bali it just they have...' is ungrammatical. 'They' vaguely refers to people or places; better to say 'Bali has' or 'there are'. 'Static and.' is incomplete. Suggestion: restructure the sentence: use a clear introductory phrase (For example), correct verb placement ('Bali has' or 'there are'), use plural or singular consistently ('beaches' if plural), and finish the thought with a suitable adjective like 'spectacular'.