Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn và tránh tiếng ồm ồm (uh). Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn chụp và lý do. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (sometime -> sometimes, coffees -> coffee).

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I often take close-up shots of my coffee at cafés and wide shots of natural scenes like parks and rivers because they help me notice small details and relax.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng cần tổ chức rõ ràng và sửa ngữ pháp. Bắt đầu với một câu chủ đề trực tiếp nêu rõ lựa chọn, rồi dùng liên từ để giải thích lý do. Tránh câu rời rạc và những cụm không rõ nghĩa (ví dụ: "From explain working through flights or by river cleared"). Hãy cho 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể về cảnh bạn thích.

例: I prefer rural views because open landscapes and greenery help me relax and feel closer to nature. For instance, after a busy week I like walking by a quiet river or through wide fields, which calms me and clears my mind.

提案: Câu trả lời hiện hơi mơ hồ và không mạch lạc. Nên nêu rõ quan điểm (ví dụ: both/depends) và giải thích lý do với liên từ (because, however). Tránh filler words (uh) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (countries, happier). Cung cấp một ví dụ so sánh cụ thể giữa trong nước và nước ngoài.

例: I’d say it depends — I enjoy views in my own country because familiar rural spots help me relax, but I also love views abroad because new landscapes and cultures make me feel excited. For example, a peaceful local lake is calming, while a mountain view in another country feels inspiring.

× Yeah, I like taking pictures. Uh, sometime I go out and take pictures like, uh, coffees, a picture of nature.

✓ Yeah, I like taking pictures. Sometimes I go out and take pictures of things like coffee and nature.

The error involves incorrect use of 'sometime' instead of 'sometimes' (frequency adverb) and incorrect noun forms and prepositions. Use 'sometimes' for occasional actions. Use 'take pictures of' (correct preposition) and plural/uncountable forms: 'coffee' (uncountable) or 'cups of coffee' and 'nature' without 'a'. Suggestion: replace 'sometime' with 'sometimes', use 'take pictures of', and list items correctly.

× I prefer views in rural area because open landscape and green help me relax and feel close to nature.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because open landscapes and greenery help me relax and feel close to nature.

The errors are incorrect preposition/article and noun forms. Use plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area' and plural 'landscapes' for general statements. Use 'greenery' as a noun meaning vegetation, and include 'the' if using singular. Suggestion: say 'in rural areas' and pluralize nouns for generalizations.

× From explain working through flights or by river cleared it's my after a busy week.

✓ For example, walking through fields or by a river is my preference after a busy week.

This sentence is ungrammatical and disordered. 'From explain' is incorrect; use 'for example' to introduce examples. 'Working' should be 'walking' if intention is walking. 'Through flights' makes no sense; likely 'fields'. Use 'by a river' with article 'a'. 'It's my after a busy week' should be 'is my preference after a busy week' or 'is what I like to do after a busy week'. Suggestion: reorder to 'For example, walking through fields or by a river is what I prefer after a busy week.'

× Uh, maybe between because, uh, fewer in my own countries is help me relax and help me, uh.

✓ Maybe it depends, because being in my own country helps me relax...

The original uses wrong structure 'maybe between' and 'fewer in my own countries'. Use 'maybe it depends' to express uncertainty. Use singular 'country' or 'my own country' and correct verb agreement: 'helps me relax' (third-person singular). Suggestion: say 'Maybe it depends, because being in my own country helps me relax.'

× Comfortable in other countries is make me hap happy and.

✓ Being in other countries makes me happy and comfortable.

Errors include incorrect word order and verb form. Use gerund 'Being in other countries' as subject, verb 'makes' (third-person singular), and adjective 'happy' and 'comfortable'. Remove duplicated 'hap'. Suggestion: reorder to 'Being in other countries makes me happy and comfortable.'