Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на более естественной и чёткой структуре ответа: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины и пример. Избегайте звуковых паразитов («uh») и неточных выражений («significant place») — используйте более подходящую лексику. Также сократите ответ до 2–3 предложений, чтобы быть более связным и естественным.

例: Yes, I do. I take photos to preserve memories of places I visit and to share them with my friends and family, for example, when I travel to a new city I always photograph the main sights to show them later.

提案: Улучшите грамматику и связность: начните с чёткого утверждения, затем приведите причины с использованием связок (because, since, as). Исправьте ошибки в временах и согласовании (например, «I grew up», «I feel connected»). Добавьте один конкретный пример сцены, которую вы любите фотографировать.

例: I prefer photographing rural areas because I feel more connected to the countryside, since I grew up there. For example, I enjoy taking pictures of rolling fields and old farmhouses in the golden hour.

提案: Сделайте ответ точным и грамматически корректным: начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Избегайте некорректных словосочетаний («beautiful mess») и согласуйте числа и артикли («my country», «these places»). Также уточните, что именно вас привлекает в местных пейзажах.

例: I prefer scenery in my own country because there are many beautiful places I haven't explored yet, such as lakes and mountain trails, so I often photograph them to plan future trips.

× To be honest, yes, uh, because I want to save significant place in my memories and in addition, I like to share it with my friends and my family. I think it's my small hobby.

✓ To be honest, yes, uh, because I want to save significant places in my memories and, in addition, I like to share them with my friends and my family. I think it's my small hobby.

The original sentence used 'save' with 'place' which is awkward; use plural 'places' to match 'memories'. Also replace the noun with plural and use the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'places'. Use commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'save memories of significant places' or 'keep photos of significant places' for more natural phrasing.

× Personally I prefer more doing pictures in rural areas because I feel connect with countryside.

✓ Personally, I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because I feel connected with the countryside.

Use 'taking pictures' rather than 'doing pictures' (verb+noun collocation). 'Prefer more' is incorrect; use 'prefer' alone or 'prefer to'. 'Feel connect' requires past participle 'connected' and 'the countryside' needs the definite article. Suggestion: 'I prefer taking pictures in rural areas because I feel connected to the countryside.'

× I grown up in rural area and I like this wild views.

✓ I grew up in a rural area and I like these wild views.

Use past tense 'grew up' (not 'grown' which is past participle). Add the article 'a' before 'rural area'. 'This wild views' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun; use 'these wild views'. Suggestion: 'I grew up in the countryside, and I like these wild landscapes.'

× To be honest, I prefer views in my own countries because there are a lot of beautiful mess, a lot of beautiful places which I haven't explored yet and this places remind about.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in my own country because there are a lot of beautiful places that I haven't explored yet and these places remind me of home.

Use singular 'country' (not 'countries') to match 'my own'. 'A lot of beautiful mess' is incorrect; likely 'a lot of beautiful places'. 'This places' should be 'these places' to agree in number. Also add 'me of' after 'remind' to complete the expression. Suggestion: 'I prefer views in my own country because there are many beautiful places I haven't explored yet, and these places remind me of home.'