Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and accurate: avoid fillers (uh), correct word choices, use a clear topic sentence and 1–2 specific supporting details. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences and use linking words if adding detail. For example, say what kinds of views you like, why, and how you share them.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views, especially mountain scenery and lakes. For example, I often photograph sunrise over the peaks because it creates lasting memories, and I usually share my best shots on Instagram to show friends.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary (e.g. "rural areas," "lively?" likely intended "river" or "lively"), and one specific reason with a linking word. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the mountains, rivers, and open fields are peaceful. As a result, I feel relaxed and refreshed when I walk in the countryside, which helps me recharge after a busy week.

提案: Give a direct answer first (e.g. "It depends") and then give one clear specific reason and example. Remove fillers, fix grammar, and use linking words like "because" or "however" to make the answer coherent. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

例: It depends: I enjoy views in my country because I know the best spots and feel connected to them, but I also appreciate views abroad for their variety. For instance, local beaches are comforting, whereas mountains in another country can offer a completely new experience.

× Absolutely, I like to take a picture of the different view, especially, uh, mountain scenery and liver. It make me the good memory and I like to take a photography to show on the social media success Instagram, Facebook.

✓ Absolutely, I like to take pictures of different views, especially mountain scenery and rivers. They create good memories, and I like to post my photos on social media such as Instagram and Facebook.

Multiple issues: (1) Singular and plural issue (ID 1): 'a picture of the different view' should be plural 'pictures of different views' when speaking generally. (2) Article errors (ID 22)/Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns: 'the different view' is incorrect in this context; no 'the' needed. (3) Incorrect word choice/spelling: 'liver' should be 'rivers'. (4) Subject-verb agreement/Present tense (IDs 27 and 6): 'It make me the good memory' - subject and verb disagree; use plural subject 'They create' and correct noun 'memories'. (5) Incorrect use of nouns/articles: 'take a photography' should be 'take photos' or 'take a photograph'. (6) Word order and collocation: 'show on the social media success Instagram, Facebook' should be 'post my photos on social media such as Instagram and Facebook'. Suggestion: use plural forms for general habits, ensure subject and verb agree, choose correct nouns (rivers), and use common verbs/collocations like 'take pictures' and 'post on social media'.

× Personally, I prefer view in the rural area because the view from the liver mountains and open fields are so peaceful.

✓ Personally, I prefer views in rural areas because the views of the river, the mountains, and the open fields are so peaceful.

Issues: (1) Singular and plural issue (ID 1): 'prefer view' should be 'prefer views' when speaking generally. 'the rural area' -> 'rural areas' or 'the countryside' for natural phrasing. (2) Incorrect use of pronouns/nouns (ID 12) and word choice: 'liver mountains' is incorrect; intended words likely 'river, mountains' or 'liveliness' unclear. I corrected to 'river, the mountains' and included commas. (3) Subject-verb agreement (ID 27): original had 'are' correctly for plural but sentence needed consistent plural nouns. Suggestion: use plural forms and correct noun choices; if you mean a single countryside, say 'the countryside' or 'rural areas'.

× They makes me feel relaxed and refreshed and the next season the natural is the treatment.

✓ They make me feel relaxed and refreshed, and nature is restorative in every season.

Issues: (1) Subject-verb agreement (ID 27): 'They makes' should be 'They make' because 'they' requires plural verb. (2) Sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect word choice: 'and the next season the natural is the treatment' is ungrammatical and unclear. I rephrased to 'and nature is restorative in every season' to convey that natural scenes provide healing/relaxation across seasons. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and express ideas in a single clear clause; replace awkward phrases with common collocations like 'restorative' or 'good for me'.

× Personally is, uh, depend on the situation, like some time in the your country is a beautiful and another country is a beautiful as well.

✓ Personally, it depends on the situation. Sometimes your own country is beautiful, and other countries are beautiful as well.

Issues: (1) Sentence structure errors (ID 26): 'Personally is, uh, depend on the situation' is missing the subject and incorrect verb form; correct form is 'Personally, it depends on the situation.' (2) Incorrect use of pronouns/articles (ID 12 and 22): 'some time in the your country is a beautiful' should be 'Sometimes your own country is beautiful'. Remove extra article 'the' before 'your'. (3) Singular and plural issue (ID 1): 'another country is a beautiful as well' should be 'other countries are beautiful as well' or 'another country is beautiful as well'. Suggestion: use 'it depends' for general statements, 'sometimes' as an adverb, and match singular/plural consistently.

× Uh-huh. Is that different? You stay if you stay on your, uh, country, maybe you have the more happy.

✓ Is that different? If you stay in your country, you might be happier.

Issues: (1) Sentence structure errors (ID 26): 'You stay if you stay on your, uh, country' is ungrammatical; use conditional structure 'If you stay in your country'. (2) Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11): use 'in' or 'in your country', not 'on your country'. (3) Modal verb usage and adjective/adverb use (IDs 4 and 13): 'maybe you have the more happy' is incorrect; use modal 'might' and comparative adjective 'happier' -> 'you might be happier'. Suggestion: form conditionals properly: 'If + present, will/might + base verb', use correct prepositions for places, and use comparative forms like 'happier' rather than 'more happy' (though 'more happy' is sometimes possible, 'happier' is preferred).