Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and articles), avoid repetition, and give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word to connect reason to main idea.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit a new town I always photograph the skyline and local streets because they capture the place’s atmosphere and remind me of the trip.

提案: Make the answer direct and reduce repetition. Use comparative language and provide a specific reason or example with a linking word (e.g., because, for example). Correct minor grammar (subject-verb agreement, adjectives).

例: I prefer rural views because they usually have more trees and open landscapes. For example, I enjoy walking through countryside paths where the natural scenery feels peaceful and visually striking compared with busy city streets.

提案: Clarify your main point and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence saying you prefer your country, then give a specific, logical reason. Avoid confusing phrases ("6 autumns") — explain what you mean (unique seasons/climate). Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in my own country because its climate produces many distinct seasons and varied landscapes. For instance, we experience multiple seasonal changes that create different colours and atmospheres throughout the year, so I enjoy photographing local scenery more than foreign places.

× So I took pictures whenever I go like a interesting places, I'll have to capture those moments.

✓ So I take pictures whenever I go to interesting places; I have to capture those moments.

Errors: incorrect past tense 'took' when describing habitual action (should be present simple), incorrect verb form 'go' sequence, article misuse 'a interesting places' and plural mismatch, and awkward sentence structure. Recommendation: Use present simple for habits ('I take pictures'), use correct preposition 'go to', use plural without 'a' ('interesting places'), and split into two clauses connected properly (semicolon or and).

× Well, I prefer the rural areas because the rural areas have more trees and plants and it's looking very beautiful compared to urban areas.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas because they have more trees and plants and look much more beautiful compared to urban areas.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before general plural 'rural areas'; subject-verb agreement/personal pronoun needed ('they' instead of 'the rural areas' repeated with 'it's'); incorrect use of progressive 'it's looking' for a general state (use simple present 'look'); weak comparative phrasing. Recommendation: Use general plural without 'the', replace repeated noun with 'they', use simple present for general truths, and 'much more beautiful' for clearer comparison.

× When I prepare my own country views causes beautiful and the nature of our country is like we like we have 6 autumns to compare to other countries.

✓ When I think about the views in my own country, they are beautiful, and the nature here is unique: we have six seasons rather than the usual four in other countries.

Errors: 'When I prepare my own country views' is incorrect phrasing and lacks clarity (sentence structure); 'causes beautiful' is ungrammatical; redundant and repetitive 'we like we'; numeral '6' should be spelled 'six' in formal sentence; comparison unclear. Recommendation: Rephrase to 'When I think about the views in my own country' for clarity, use simple present for general truths ('they are beautiful'), spell out numbers in speech transcripts optionally, and express comparison clearly ('we have six seasons rather than the usual four').

× Maximum country doesn't have the six seasons but we actually have, so I prefer my country.

✓ Most countries don't have six seasons, but we do, so I prefer my country.

Errors: 'Maximum country' is incorrect word choice; unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'six seasons'; awkward clause order and tense. Recommendation: Use 'Most countries' for generalization, 'don't' for plural negative, omit 'the' before unspecific countable noun phrase 'six seasons', and simplify clause to 'but we do'.