Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief supporting reason with a specific example. Use correct tense and plural forms, and avoid unnecessary details about social media if not relevant.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. It makes me feel happy to capture interesting scenes, and I often post a few photos online to share them with friends — for example, I recently posted a sunset photo from the beach and several friends commented on the colours.

提案: Give a clear preference statement and follow with specific reasons and a short example. Remove filler words and correct vocabulary usage (e.g., "rural areas" plural, "the breeze" instead of "the wind of it"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: I prefer views in rural areas to urban ones because the countryside is quieter and has more natural scenery. For example, I enjoy watching rolling hills and feeling the fresh breeze when I visit my parents' village.

提案: This answer is unclear and ungrammatical. Give a direct statement (own country or abroad) and explain with a clear reason and one specific example. Avoid vague words and correct grammar.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know the landscape and cultural context better, so I appreciate subtle details. For instance, visiting the national parks here feels more meaningful because I understand the flora and history.

× I like taking picture because it made me feel happy especially when I post it on the Internet and people comment and like me.

✓ I like taking pictures because it makes me feel happy, especially when I post them on the Internet and people comment and like my photos.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match the general activity of taking many photos (singular/plural issue). The verbs' tenses and forms also needed adjustment: 'made' (past) conflicts with present habitual 'I like', so use present 'makes' (present tense consistency; relates to Present tense issue but only change required by list is plural). Pronouns must match plural 'pictures' so use 'them'. Finally 'like me' is unnatural for 'liking the photos'; 'like my photos' is clearer.

× I like taking picture because it made me feel happy especially when I post it on the Internet and people comment and like me.

✓ I like taking pictures because it makes me feel happy, especially when I post them on the Internet and people comment and like my photos.

The sentence mixes present habitual 'I like' with past 'made'. Maintain present tense for habitual actions: use 'makes' instead of 'made'. Also ensure pronoun agreement: 'them' for plural 'pictures' and 'like my photos' clarifies the object of liking.

× I prefer rural areas more than urban because umm, rural area has a good view and relies with the wind of it.

✓ I prefer rural areas more than urban areas because rural areas have good views and are pleasant because of the wind.

Mismatch between singular 'rural area' and plural 'rural areas' in the same sentence; keep number consistent (plural). Also 'view' should be plural 'views' to match general preference. 'Relies with the wind of it' is ungrammatical; replace with a clear passive/active description: 'are pleasant because of the wind.'

× I prefer rural areas more than urban because umm, rural area has a good view and relies with the wind of it.

✓ I prefer rural areas more than urban areas because rural areas have good views and are pleasant because of the wind.

The phrase 'relies with the wind of it' misuses preposition 'with' and structure 'rely with'; correct phrasing is 'pleasant because of the wind' using 'because of' to express cause. Also ensure consistent noun forms and clearer structure.

× I prefer the new in my country because it relies and he'll suggest fuel and open use for for me.

✓ I prefer the new places in my country because they are convenient and offer affordable and accessible facilities for me.

'The new' is incomplete and should be a plural noun like 'new places'. Pronouns must agree: use 'they' for plural. Original sentence contains many unclear verbs ('relies', 'he'll suggest') and repetitions; rephrase to a coherent meaning: 'are convenient and offer affordable and accessible facilities.' This fixes number agreement and clarifies intent.

× I prefer the new in my country because it relies and he'll suggest fuel and open use for for me.

✓ I prefer the new places in my country because they are convenient and offer affordable and accessible facilities for me.

The original uses 'it' and 'he'll' incorrectly; 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'places', and 'he'll' is incorrect unless referring to a person. The sentence likely intended to describe the places themselves, so use 'they are' and a verb phrase that matches inanimate subjects.