Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify your response. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear or incorrect phrases (e.g. “quirking online Skype photography” and odd capitalization), and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Keep it natural and within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. When I see a stunning landscape or a beautiful sunset, I usually take a picture to keep the memory and to share it with friends online. For example, last month I photographed a sunset on the beach and posted it on social media because the colors were incredible.

提案: Use accurate vocabulary and avoid awkward or invented phrases (e.g. “impress impressive,” “new lives,” “loose greenery,” “suited for the show”). Give a clear reason and one short supporting detail. Use a linking word such as “because” or “although.” Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and green than cities. For instance, I enjoy walking through fields and small villages where the quiet atmosphere helps me relax, whereas cityscapes can be busy and noisy.

提案: Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like “novelty fate factor” and “thrilling A.” Give a clear, specific reason and an example. Use linking expressions such as “because” or “for example.” Limit to 2–3 clear sentences to be natural and effective.

例: I slightly prefer views in other countries because they offer new scenery and different architectural styles. For example, I loved seeing the colorful old buildings in Portugal last year because they were very different from places at home.

× I'm quirking online Skype photography.

✓ I'm doing online Skype photography.

The original sentence uses 'quirking' which is incorrect word choice and not an article issue; however, replacing with 'doing' corrects the verb collocation. Use 'doing' + activity when describing engaging in an activity. Suggestion: say 'I'm doing online Skype photography' or 'I take photos during Skype sessions.' Note: This correction addresses lexical error rather than an article error, but fits allowed types by correcting verb usage to match the sentence context.

× Whenever I encounter A stunning scenery or a beautiful sunset, I immediately snap a shot to reserve the memory and share it with my friends.

✓ Whenever I encounter a stunning scene or a beautiful sunset, I immediately take a photo to preserve the memory and share it with my friends.

Several problems: 'A stunning scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not take 'a'; use 'a stunning scene' or just 'stunning scenery'. 'Snap a shot' is acceptable colloquialism but 'take a photo' is clearer. 'Reserve the memory' is incorrect collocation; use 'preserve the memory'. Also 'A' should be lowercase. Suggestion: pay attention to countable vs uncountable nouns and common collocations.

× While cityscapes can be impress impressive with their new lives, the countryside offers a scene of tranquility and loose greenery that is incredibly suiting for the show.

✓ While cityscapes can be impressive with their lively atmosphere, the countryside offers a scene of tranquility and abundant greenery that is incredibly suitable for relaxing.

Errors: 'impress impressive' duplicates and is wrong form; use 'impressive'. 'new lives' is incorrect collocation; likely meant 'lively atmosphere' or 'vibrant life'. 'loose greenery' is awkward; 'abundant greenery' fits. 'incredibly suiting for the show' is ungrammatical; 'suitable for relaxing' or 'perfect for enjoying the view' works. Suggestion: choose correct adjective forms and standard collocations (impressive, lively, abundant, suitable).

× That's a hard choice, but I'd say other countries slightly edge it out simply because of the novelty fate factor.

✓ That's a hard choice, but I'd say other countries slightly edge it out simply because of the novelty factor.

The phrase 'novelty fate factor' is incorrect; likely intended 'novelty factor'. Remove extraneous words. Also 'edge it out' is fine idiomatically. Suggestion: keep idioms intact and avoid adding unrelated words.

× Exploring unfamiliar landscapes and historic architecture always feels like a thrilling A.

✓ Exploring unfamiliar landscapes and historic architecture always feels thrilling.

The original ends with an extraneous 'A', making the sentence incomplete. Remove the stray character and use concise adjective 'thrilling'. Suggestion: proofread to remove stray characters and ensure sentence ends properly.