Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant but a bit fragmented and slightly repetitive. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid short, choppy sentences by combining related ideas and giving a brief reason or example to make your response more coherent and informative.

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I enjoy capturing nature’s beauty; for example, I often photograph sunsets and forests to share on social media. In addition, sharing these photos with friends helps me remember special moments and get feedback on my photography.

提案: Good direct response with specific details, but the answer repeats 'love' and could be more concise and connected with linking words. Combine sentences and add a brief explanation or contrast to strengthen the response.

例: I prefer rural views because I’m fond of natural landscapes; for instance, I enjoy the greenery and the calm blue rivers, which feel more relaxing than busy city scenes.

提案: Your answer expresses a personal preference and emotion, which is good, but sentence structure and grammar need polishing. Use a clear topic sentence, then support with specific examples or reasons linked logically. Avoid awkward phrasing and ensure correct tense and article use (e.g., 'the ocean', 'how beautiful life can be').

例: I prefer views in other countries because I love the ocean; for example, since my country has mainly mountains and rivers, I find the sea’s vastness and gentle waves very calming and a reminder to take breaks and appreciate life.

× I prefer views in other countries as I love ocean.

✓ I prefer views in other countries as I love the ocean.

'Ocean' is a singular, countable noun when referring to the ocean as a general concept, so it requires the definite article 'the'. Use 'the ocean' to refer to the sea in general. Suggestion: use 'the ocean' or 'oceans' depending on whether you mean the ocean in general or oceans in general.

× I come from a country where there are mountains and rivers but I prefer the calm nature of the ocean.

✓ I come from a country with mountains and rivers, but I prefer the calm of the ocean.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but wordy and slightly awkward. 'Where there are' is unnecessary; 'a country with mountains and rivers' is more natural. Also 'the calm nature of the ocean' is redundant; 'the calm of the ocean' is clearer. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases and use commas before coordinating conjunctions joining independent clauses.

× It reminds me that I need to take a break from my life and how beautiful can life be.

✓ It reminds me that I need to take a break from my life and how beautiful life can be.

The clause 'how beautiful can life be' incorrectly uses question word order within a declarative sentence. In reported/descriptive clauses, use subject–verb order: 'how beautiful life can be.' Suggestion: use declarative word order for indirect statements and avoid mixing question structure into statements.