Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 긍정적이고 일상성을 보여주지만 문법 오류와 중복, 그리고 구체성이 부족합니다. 문장을 간결하게 정리하고 시제와 주어·동사의 일치를 고치세요. 또한 왜 사진 찍기를 좋아하는지(예: 감정, 목적, 어떤 장면을 선호하는지) 구체적인 이유나 예시를 한두 가지 더 추가하면 답변이 더 자연스럽고 설득력 있어집니다. 연결어(예: because, so, therefore)를 적절히 사용해 문장 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요.

例: Yes, I do. I take pictures almost every day because photography helps me relax and notice small details. For example, I often photograph sunrise scenes near my home since the light is beautiful and peaceful.

提案: 대답이 불완전하고 문장이 끊겨 의사 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 도시와 시골 중 어느 쪽을 선호하는지 분명히 말한 뒤 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 장소 이름을 말할 때는 간결하게 표현하고 불필요한 말(uh, so)을 줄이세요. 연결어(because, so, therefore, for example)를 사용해 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I dislike noisy streets and crowded places. For example, I often go to Lulu Street, which is calm and has tree-lined paths ideal for photography.

提案: 의미 전달이 불분명하고 문법 오류(시제, 어순)와 어색한 단어 선택('skins')가 있습니다. 먼저 선호도를 분명히 밝히고, 왜 다른 나라의 풍경을 선호하는지 구체적인 이유(다양성, 색감, 문화적 차이 등)를 제시하세요. 문장을 완결형으로 만들고 연결어를 사용해 생각의 흐름을 분명히 표현하세요.

例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because they offer more variety in landscapes and cultures. For instance, I enjoy capturing colorful markets and historic architecture abroad, which I don't often find at home.

× Oh yes, actually I'm about to go first. So I take a picture.

✓ Oh yes, actually I'm about to go first, so I'll take a picture.

The learner used present simple 'I take' where a near-future action is intended. Use 'be about to' + base verb or 'will' for a future action. Here 'I'm about to go first' implies imminent action, so 'I'll take a picture' or 'I'm going to take a picture' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'I'll take' or 'I'm going to take' for planned or immediate future actions.

× I take some pictures every day.

✓ I take some pictures every day.

This sentence is actually correct: present simple is appropriate for habitual actions. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep present simple for routines (e.g., 'I take photos every day').

× I love capturing my pictures because it's helps me.

✓ I love taking pictures because it helps me.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'capturing my pictures' (awkward collocation) and subject-pronoun/verb agreement 'it's helps'. Use 'take/taking pictures' and correct verb 'it helps' without extra 's' after contraction. 'Capturing pictures' is possible but 'taking pictures' is more natural. Also 'it helps me' is correct. Suggestion: Use 'I love taking pictures because it helps me'.

× I prefer capturing. In Lulu St. because, uh, I don't like noisy cities so I usually go to quiet.

✓ I prefer taking photos on Lulu Street because I don't like noisy cities, so I usually go to quiet places.

Multiple issues: 'prefer capturing' is incomplete — 'prefer' needs an object or verb form ('prefer taking photos'). 'In Lulu St.' should be 'on Lulu Street' (preposition and full word), and sentence fragments cause structure errors. 'Go to quiet' lacks a noun; add 'places'. Also punctuation needed to connect clauses. Suggestion: Use complete noun phrases and correct prepositions: 'I prefer taking photos on Lulu Street because I don't like noisy cities, so I usually go to quiet places.'

× I prefer going to different areas because in my country I'm I was capturing so many skins, so I wanna. Take pictures different.

✓ I prefer going to different areas because in my country I was taking so many shots, so I want to take different pictures.

Several tense and lexical errors: 'I'm I was capturing' mixes present and past; choose past 'I was taking' for past repeated action. 'Capturing so many skins' is incorrect vocabulary — 'shots' or 'pictures' fits. 'So I wanna. Take pictures different' has punctuation and form problems; use 'I want to take different pictures.' Also use standard 'want to' rather than 'wanna' in formal correction. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past habits ('I was taking so many photos') and correct word order for adjectives ('different pictures').