Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并完整，句子要更连贯，避免语法错误和重复。可以用1个主题句表明喜好，随后用1–2句具体细节和理由，并用连接词衔接。注意时态和词形（例如“I pretty love”应为“I really love”），以及完成句子不要中断。

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views because I love how light changes a scene. For example, sunsets and mountains often have beautiful colors, while quiet streets can feel peaceful; when I travel, I usually take a few pictures to capture the atmosphere rather than photographing everything.

提案: 句子要更准确并避免语法错误（如“the both”、“I is”）。先给出直接选择，再用2个具体原因支持，用连接词（for example, because, so）使逻辑更清楚。保持句子简洁，不超过5句。

例: I prefer rural areas because they feel more open and peaceful. For example, mountains and rivers offer fresh air and quiet surroundings, so I can relax and unwind more easily than in busy cities.

提案: 先直接回答，然后给出具体原因和例子，注意名词单复数和冠词（例如“this places”应为“these places”）。避免口头语“uh”并把句子说完整。增加一两个具体例子或对比会更有说服力。

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know many beautiful spots, such as the mountain ranges and traditional gardens. These places remind me of home and help me feel calm and relaxed, whereas foreign views may be interesting but less familiar.

× Yes, I pretty love taking photos especially the light is nice All the views are pretty special like the sunset or mountains or the quiet street.

✓ Yes, I pretty much love taking photos, especially when the light is nice. All the views are quite special, like the sunset, mountains, or quiet streets.

句中“pretty love”用法不正确，應使用副詞短語“pretty much”修飾動詞；且“especially the light is nice”語序和連接不自然，改為“especially when the light is nice”更符合語法和語意。另外“pretty special”在此處更自然用“quite special”或“pretty special”但要注意句子流暢；列舉時須用複數“streets”或保持一致性並在項目間添加逗號。建議：使用正確的副詞或副詞短語修飾動詞，使用從句或連接詞表原因或情況，列舉時注意一致的數和標點。

× When I'm traveling I don't take photos all the time I just.

✓ When I'm traveling, I don't take photos all the time; I just take a few when something catches my eye.

原句以“I just.” 結尾是不完整句，缺少賓語或補充說明，導致句子片段化。需要補全來表達完整意思，例如說明“我只是拍幾張”或“只在有吸引我的東西時拍”。建議：避免不完整句，補全主要動作的賓語或補語，適當使用標點連接從句。

× Well I would say I enjoy the both but if I have to choose one maybe the rural areas because I is more open than the cities and like the mountains or rivers can have more fresh air that I could feel more relaxed and calm.

✓ Well, I would say I enjoy both, but if I have to choose one, maybe rural areas, because they are more open than cities, and places like mountains or rivers have fresher air that helps me feel more relaxed and calm.

原句存在主謂不一致：“the rural areas” 與後文動詞“is”不一致，正確應用複數主語“they are”。此外“enjoy the both”中不應有定冠詞“the”，應為“enjoy both”。“can have more fresh air that I could feel more relaxed and calm”語序和搭配不當，改為“have fresher air that helps me feel more relaxed and calm”更自然。建議：注意主語單複數與動詞形式一致，避免在雙胞指示詞前加不必要冠詞，調整從句使語意連貫。

× I prefer views in my own country because there are so many beautiful and fantastic views like mountains or gardens and this places can help me, uh, feel calm and relax and.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because there are so many beautiful and fantastic places, like mountains or gardens, and these places can help me feel calm and relaxed.

句中“this places”使用了錯誤的指示代詞與數不一致，應為“these places”。“views like mountains or gardens”語義重複且可改為“places”。另外“feel calm and relax and”結尾不完整，應使用形容詞“relaxed”來與“feel”搭配，並去掉多餘連詞。建議：確保指示代詞與名詞數一致（this/these），使用正確詞類（relaxed 作形容詞而不是動詞不定式），並避免句尾未完成片語。