Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer communicates the idea but is long, repetitive and has some grammar issues. Be concise: give a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Fix verb forms and pronouns (e.g. remind → remember; them → it/that moment).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos help me remember special moments. For example, when I take a picture of a sunset, I can later recall the exact colours and the atmosphere, which makes the memory more vivid.

提案: The main idea is clear but the sentence has grammatical errors and redundancy. Use a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word. Correct comparative forms and article use (e.g. 'rural areas', 'richer surroundings', avoid 'more richer').

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer richer surroundings and more natural beauty. For instance, rolling hills and open fields create a peaceful scene compared with the busy streets of a city.

提案: Good basic response but word choice and sentence clarity need improvement. Provide a concise topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Fix grammar (e.g. 'allow me' → 'allows me'; avoid vague phrase 'seeing different').

例: I prefer views in my own country because its varied landscapes are familiar and easy to enjoy. For example, I can visit nearby mountains or lakes without travelling far, which makes it simple to relax and appreciate the scenery.

× Yes, I love that, especially when I take a picture of them that reminds me at that specific time and after that after some time I can remind them by seeing them.

✓ Yes, I love that, especially when I take a picture that reminds me of that specific moment; later I can remember it by looking at the photo.

The original has several issues. 'take a picture of them' misuses 'of them' for 'of it' or simply 'a picture'—use a clear noun. 'reminds me at that specific time' is incorrect preposition and noun choice; use 'reminds me of that specific moment'. 'I can remind them by seeing them' uses 'remind' reflexively and 'them' incorrectly; use 'remember it by looking at the photo'. Also change 'after that after some time' (redundant) to 'later'. Suggestions: simplify clauses, use 'remind someone of something' and 'remember' for recalling memories, and use 'by looking at the photo' for the means.

× If I have to choose one of them, then I would choose rural area because that has more richer surroundings and beautiful scene therefore.

✓ If I had to choose one, I would choose a rural area because it has richer surroundings and more beautiful scenery.

Errors: 'If I have to choose one of them' is awkward; use conditional 'If I had to choose one'. 'rural area' needs an article 'a'. 'that has more richer' is ungrammatical: 'more' should not combine with comparative '-er'; use 'richer'. 'beautiful scene' should be plural or abstract 'beautiful scenery'. 'therefore' is misplaced; omit or place appropriately. Suggestions: use correct article with singular countable nouns, do not stack comparatives ('more' + 'richer'), and use 'scenery' for overall landscape.

× I prefer views in my own country because our country has a lot of beautiful scenery and nature which allow me to enjoy the view while seeing different.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because we have a lot of beautiful scenery and nature, which allow me to enjoy different views.

Problems: 'our country has' is fine, but 'which allow me' should agree in number with the plural subject 'scenery and nature' — 'allow' is correct but sounds odd with 'we have' transition; better 'we have a lot of beautiful scenery and natural areas, which allow me...' Also 'enjoy the view while seeing different' is unclear and ungrammatical; replace with 'enjoy different views'. Suggestions: use clear noun phrases like 'scenery and natural areas' and match relative clause meaning; keep present simple for preferences.