Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğal ve anlamlı olmalı. Kısa, doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kullanın ve ardından 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Nesnelerin listesini düzelterek 'apple' gibi gereksiz veya yanlış sözcükleri çıkartın. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümleleri akıcı yapın ve maksimum 3-4 cümle ile sınırlayın.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like landscapes such as the sea and countryside because they look peaceful. I also take pictures of interesting buildings and streets when I visit cities.

提案: Cümle yapısını ve kelime seçimlerini düzeltin. Konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra nedenleri net ve öz olarak verin; gereksiz tekrarları ve yanlış kelimeleri (ör. 'steel noise', 'outwind', 'operative', 'Lily') değiştirin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak kıyaslama yapın ve 2–3 cümleyle sınırlayın. Ayrıca dilbilgisi ve artikellere dikkat edin.

例: I prefer rural views because open spaces and greenery feel relaxing and quiet, away from city noise. For example, walking by fields and rivers helps me unwind. However, I sometimes enjoy urban views for their lively atmosphere and interesting architecture.

提案: Cevap daha açık ve mantıklı olmalı. 'Wheels' gibi yanlış kelimeleri düzeltin ve dolgu kelimelerinden ('uh') kaçının. Konu cümlesinde net bir tercih belirtin, ardından 1-2 özgül neden ve kısa bir örnek verin. Cümle yapısını basit tutun ve 2 cümleyi geçmeyin.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful landscapes and a long coastline. For example, I enjoy visiting the seaside towns where the scenery is peaceful and familiar.

× I like taking pictures and apple and sea and a home and a car.

✓ I like taking pictures of apples, the sea, homes, and cars.

The sentence lists nouns but mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. Use plural forms for general categories (apples, homes, cars) and include appropriate articles for specific nouns (the sea). Also add 'of' after 'taking pictures' to indicate what is being photographed. Suggestion: use consistent pluralization for general items and correct preposition use (taking pictures of).

× I prefer rural areas because open land, space and greenery are more relaxing and refreshing, offering a peaceful escape for from steel noise.

✓ I prefer rural areas because open land, space, and greenery are more relaxing and refreshing, offering a peaceful escape from street noise.

The phrase 'escape for from' is incorrect; use 'escape from' to indicate what you are avoiding. 'Steel noise' is likely a mistaken word choice; 'street noise' is the appropriate collocation. Also add commas for list clarity and the article 'the' is not necessary before general nouns. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'from' and choose correct noun collocations like 'street noise'.

× For example, I am just walking by fields and rivers which helps me outwind.

✓ For example, I just walk by fields and rivers, which helps me unwind.

Mixing 'I am just walking' (present continuous) with a general statement 'which helps me' is inconsistent. Use simple present 'I just walk' for habitual actions. 'Outwind' is not a word; the correct verb is 'unwind' meaning to relax. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct verb choice 'unwind'.

× However, I also operative urban views occasionally for their Lily atmosphere and.

✓ However, I also visit urban areas occasionally for their lively atmosphere.

'Operative' is the wrong word form; use a verb like 'visit'. 'Urban views' is awkward—'urban areas' fits better. 'Lily' is a misspelling of 'lively'. The sentence also ends incomplete; add the noun 'atmosphere' and remove trailing 'and'. Suggestion: choose the correct verb and adjective spellings and complete the sentence structure. (This maps to verb form issues in the provided list.)

× I prefer wheels in my country because, uh, my country is very beautiful and very big sea.

✓ I prefer views in my country because my country is very beautiful and has many seas.

'Wheels' is incorrect word choice for 'views'. The phrase 'very big sea' is ungrammatical; if you mean multiple coastal areas say 'has many seas' or 'has a long coastline'. Also remove filler 'uh' in written form. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'views' and express coastal features with appropriate nouns like 'seas' or 'a long coastline'.