Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler phrases like “you know” and informal shortenings (e.g. “pics”). Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel with my family. For example, I often take wide shots of landscapes to preserve memories of the places we visit, which helps me remember the trip. Because these photos capture the atmosphere, I review them often after returning home.

提案: Good content and relevance. Improve coherence by using a clear topic sentence and one linking phrase to expand. Add a specific example or contrast to make the answer more vivid and avoid repetition of “views”. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a small town and feel more connected to nature. For instance, I love scenes of the ocean at sunrise or wide farm fields, which feel peaceful and photogenic. In contrast, urban views often feel crowded and less relaxing to photograph.

提案: The answer lacks clarity and has unclear phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific examples with concise details. Avoid vague endings and unclear place names; if mentioning locations, spell them correctly and explain briefly why you like them. Use linking words to make the response coherent.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because they are familiar and varied. For example, I have visited Cebu and Sagada, where coastal scenery and highland limestone formations offered very different but beautiful photo opportunities. Therefore, I usually choose domestic trips when I want to take landscape photos.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel with my family.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel with my family.

No change required for grammar: 'taking' is correctly used as a present participle after 'like' to indicate a preference for an action. Keep as is.

× I like to remember the places I go and you know the memories I capture with my pictures, it stays with me.

✓ I like to remember the places I go, and the memories I capture with my pictures stay with me.

The original sentence has a run-on structure and a subject-verb agreement error: 'memories' is plural so the verb should be 'stay' not 'stays'. Also use a comma and coordinating conjunction correctly to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: separate clauses with a comma + conjunction or make two sentences; ensure plural subject uses plural verb.

× So I do really like taking pics.

✓ So I really do like taking pictures.

'Taking' is correctly used, but 'pics' is informal; 'pictures' is more appropriate in a speaking test. Also placing 'really' before 'do' or after 'do' is acceptable; 'I really do like' emphasizes the preference. No grammatical change to verb form required.

× I prefer the views in rural areas since I grew up in a province in a small town.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas since I grew up in a province in a small town.

Using 'the views' is not wrong but sounds specific; removing 'the' makes the statement general and more natural when comparing urban and rural views. Article choice affects specificity. Suggestion: use no article for general preference.

× I really enjoy the scenes of natural things like the views from the ocean or views from the farm.

✓ I really enjoy natural scenes, like views of the ocean or of the farm.

'Scenes of natural things' is awkward; 'natural scenes' is concise. Use 'views of' rather than 'views from' when referring to scenery showing the ocean or a farm. Also repeat the preposition 'of' for parallel structure or rephrase without repetition.

× I really love the views in my country so I've been to a lot of places from my own town to towns as far as UMM, Cebu and Sagada and really it's just you can.

✓ I really love the views in my country, so I've been to many places, from my own town to places as far as UMM, Cebu, and Sagada.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and an unclear ending 'and really it's just you can' which is ungrammatical and should be removed. Use 'many places' instead of 'a lot of places' for formality. Use commas to separate items in a list. 'Places as far as' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: remove unclear fragment and restructure into a clear sentence with proper punctuation.