Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct but expanded response: start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I enjoy taking pictures), then add one or two brief supporting details explaining why or when you do it. Use linking words if you add more than one idea. Aim for 2–3 short sentences and include specific context (what kind of views, purpose or feeling).

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me remember places and moods. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset and quiet country fields in the morning, so I can compare light and atmosphere.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain reasons with specific details and linking words (for example, because, so, and). Mention particular features of urban views you like (architecture, lights, activity) to make the answer richer. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid one-word replies.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I love the variety of architecture and the bright lights at night. For instance, I enjoy photographing tall buildings and busy streets since they offer strong shapes and interesting colors.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give concise reasons and a specific example using linking words (for example, because or for example). Explain what makes foreign views more appealing (new styles, cultural differences, landscapes) to show depth. Keep it natural and avoid filler words like “OK” or “actually.”

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often have different architecture and landscapes that I haven’t seen before. For example, I like photographing old European streets and colorful markets when I travel, as they offer unique patterns and atmosphere.

× OK, actually I prefer in other countries.

✓ OK, actually I prefer (taking pictures of) views in other countries.

The original sentence omits the object of the verb prefer and contains an extra prepositional phrase 'in other countries' without a clear object; this creates a sentence structure error. 'Prefer' requires either a noun phrase (I prefer views in other countries) or a verb phrase (I prefer to take pictures in other countries). Suggest supplying the omitted noun or verb phrase to make the sentence complete and clear. For example: 'I prefer views in other countries' or 'I prefer taking pictures of views in other countries.'