Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but contains some small grammar and word-choice errors ("this the scenery", "cities guidelines"). To improve, correct these mistakes, reduce redundancy and use one or two linking words (e.g., "for example", "so") to make the reply more coherent. Keep the answer within 3–4 sentences and vary vocabulary (e.g., "landscapes", "cityscapes").

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and observe how the scenery changes. For example, I often take cityscape photos at sunset to preserve the vivid colours and the tranquil atmosphere. I usually do this once or twice a week, and sometimes I share my best shots with friends.

提案: Good structure and clear reasons. Improve by fixing small grammar agreement ("offers" → "offer") and adding a linking word to contrast (e.g., "whereas" is fine but you can start with "however"). Add one concrete example to be more specific (e.g., a place or activity). Keep it to 3 sentences maximum.

例: I prefer rural views because open landscapes, fields and forests help me relax and feel refreshed after a busy week. For example, hiking in the hills near my town calms my mind and offers cleaner air and peaceful sounds. In contrast, urban views often feel crowded and noisy.

提案: Content is personal and relevant but has multiple mistakes in word choice ("using my own country", "familiar landscape", "feel this personal") and grammar. Improve by using correct collocations ("in my own country", "familiar landscapes", "feel less personal") and add a linking phrase to compare. Keep answer concise and include one specific place or memory.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong emotional connection to familiar landscapes and cultural landmarks. For example, seeing the mountains and coastlines where I grew up brings back fond memories and a deep sense of belonging. Views in other countries can be beautiful, but they often feel less personal to me.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and notice how this the scenery changes.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments and notice how the scenery changes.

You used 'this the scenery' which incorrectly includes an extra demonstrative and article. Remove 'this' so the noun phrase 'the scenery' is correct. Use 'the' for specific scenery already referenced. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to spot extra words and ensure correct article use.

× For example, I often photograph cities guidelines at sunset to preserve the vivid colors and tranquil atmosphere.

✓ For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to preserve the vivid colors and tranquil atmosphere.

'Cities guidelines' is ungrammatical and incorrect collocation. The intended noun is likely 'skylines' or 'cityscapes'. Also 'city' should be singular in the compound noun 'city skyline(s)' or use 'cityscapes'. Suggestion: choose correct collocations (city skyline, cityscape) and check meaning.

× I usually do this once or twice a week and sometimes I share the best shots with my friends.

✓ I usually do this once or twice a week, and sometimes I share the best shots with my friends.

Sentence is mostly correct grammatically but needs a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses for clarity. Suggestion: use commas to join independent clauses.

× Seeing fields, forests or mountains calm my mind and offers cleaner air and peaceful sounds, whereas urban views often feel crowded, noisy and stressful.

✓ Seeing fields, forests, or mountains calms my mind and offers cleaner air and peaceful sounds, whereas urban views often feel crowded, noisy, and stressful.

Subject 'Seeing fields, forests, or mountains' is a singular gerund phrase and requires singular verb 'calms' not 'calm'. Also maintain parallel verb forms: 'calms... and offers' (both singular). Add commas in lists for clarity. Suggestion: identify the true subject (the gerund phrase) and ensure verb agrees.

× I prefer using my own country because I feel a strong emotional connection to familiar landscape and cultural landmarks.

✓ I prefer my own country because I feel a strong emotional connection to familiar landscapes and cultural landmarks.

'Prefer using my own country' is awkward; 'prefer my own country' is idiomatic. Also 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'familiar' and plural 'landmarks'. Preposition 'to' after 'connection' is correct already. Suggestion: use natural verb collocations ('prefer my country') and match plural nouns when generalizing.

× For example, seeing the mountains and coastlines where I grew up brings back fond memories and deep sense of belonging, whereas views in other countries can be beautiful but feel this personal.

✓ For example, seeing the mountains and coastlines where I grew up brings back fond memories and a deep sense of belonging, whereas views in other countries can be beautiful but feel less personal.

Missing article before 'deep sense' — use 'a deep sense'. Also 'feel this personal' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'feel less personal' or 'not as personal'. Replace with 'less personal'. Suggestion: include articles for singular countable noun phrases and choose appropriate comparative adverbs ('less') for degree.