Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Briefly state your habit clearly, avoid repetition, and give one specific example with a linking phrase. Pronunciation and grammar errors reduce clarity, so use simple correct sentences (subject + verb) and a linking word like "because" or "so" to explain why you take photos. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I like taking photos of interesting views. For example, when I see a beautiful sunset, I often take a picture so I can remember the colors later.

提案: Answer directly with a clear preference, then give one or two specific reasons connected with linking words (for example, "however" or "because"). Avoid filler sounds and fix basic grammar (e.g., "I prefer rural areas" or "I prefer cities"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy quiet and natural scenery. However, I often live in the city because it has better services like hospitals and public transport.

提案: Give a clear preference and support it with specific examples using correct nouns and linking words. Mention 2–3 distinct attractions and avoid unclear phrases. Use simple grammar: subject + verb + reason. Keep answer within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because Egypt has many unique sights. For instance, there are the Pyramids of Giza, the Cairo skyline, and the Egyptian Museum, which I enjoy visiting.

× I I not take the picture for for all of you I I have been seen. But sometimes when I when I see beautiful to you or something, I first I I seen it for the first time, I try to take a picture for it as a memo.

✓ I do not take pictures of everything I have seen. But sometimes when I see something beautiful, and I notice it for the first time, I try to take a picture of it as a memory.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure errors (ID 26) and subject-verb issues (ID 27) including omitted auxiliary do for negation, repeated words, incorrect prepositions, and wrong verb forms (seen instead of see). Suggestions: use 'do not' for present simple negation, plural 'pictures' for general reference, 'take a picture of' is the correct preposition, and use simple present for habitual actions ('I see', 'I try'). Remove repetitions and split into two clear sentences for readability.

× I I prefer to live in uh. Rule rural areas but a lot of service not available in this in the countryside so I efforts to live in a city.

✓ I prefer to live in rural areas, but many services are not available in the countryside, so I try to live in a city.

Main issues are incorrect/preposition and article use and sentence structure (IDs 11, 22, 26). 'In rural areas' is correct, 'a lot of service' should be 'many services' (quantifier and plural), 'not available in the countryside' needs correct auxiliary verb 'are', and 'I efforts to live' should be 'I try to live'. Suggestions: use plural 'services' with 'many', use passive 'are not available' to show state, and use 'try' for attempt.

× I'm in the trouble to any another country so nice of using only in my country.

✓ I'm not comfortable traveling to another country, so I like to stay in my own country.

This sentence has incorrect pronoun/phrase use and sentence structure errors (IDs 12, 26). 'I'm in the trouble to any another country' is ungrammatical; correct idea likely 'I'm not comfortable traveling to another country' or 'I have trouble traveling'. 'so nice of using only in my country' is unclear; corrected to 'so I like to stay in my own country'. Suggestions: express inability/comfort with gerund 'traveling', use 'another country' without extra words, and 'my own country' is clearer.

× I live in Egypt so I so my country have a lot of unequal beautiful TI beautiful views like pyramids, Cairo, Charles museum.

✓ I live in Egypt, and my country has many beautiful and unique sights, such as the pyramids, Cairo, and the Egyptian Museum.

Errors include subject-verb agreement (ID 27), word order and adjective use (IDs 13, 18), and sentence structure (ID 26). 'My country have' should be 'my country has'. 'Unequal beautiful TI beautiful' appears to attempt 'unique beautiful' — place adjectives in correct order ('unique beautiful' is awkward; 'beautiful and unique' is natural). 'Charles museum' likely refers to 'Egyptian Museum' or another named museum; suggest correct noun. Use plural 'sights' or 'views' and 'such as' for examples. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement, choose correct adjectives and order, and use accurate proper nouns for places.